I love you with every fiber
of my cold black heart
baby! Dont let me fall, save me from hell.
I'll give up my ways, just tell
me you love me. Dont let me
hurt anymore. I need you like no other.
Tell me you love me, dont let me
die anymore, love.
I want to be with you~.
I cant stand living without you.
Author notes
For my love
A contest entry
- Can You Feel The Love? by Abstract Image.
400 points, ended March 9, 2009, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is a poem worth remembering.
it was so short but filled with so much emotion
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a poem worth remembering.....tnx for this one
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sad write here. Not what i really asked for but i enjoyed reading it.
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Interesting. It's easy to tell that you are indeed making some sort of emotional plea here to this person you love. But the flow is choppy and to make it flow more smoothly, I'd recommend that you move the 'baby!' from line three to the end of line two, let 'Don't let me/hurt anymore' be one line, put 'me you love me' with the first line in that verse, and put 'don't let me' from the first line of the second to the last verse down with line two and I think that reading it would be a much smoother experience.
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An expressed feeling of an urgent need.
The message is romantic and desperate for loves beautiful need.
I always enjoy reading the writings of people who are experiencing love, provokes memories of a love I once knew.
Beautiful sentiment...
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thanx hun
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