The sun dances through
the window, splashing
colors across the room.
Our naked forms,
entwined, take on
hues of light that
warm the fine drops
of perspiration that
lie upon our skin.
My tongue traces
a indigo trail down
your body… following
the rich color to it’s end.
I look at you and smile.
“So much better than
a pot of gold”
Author notes
Prompt: Raindrop caresses over rainbow hues
Picture Credit: http://aprilarevalo.deviantart.com/art/oriental-rainbow-55123378
40 – 60 words (60 
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Critical Comments Always Welcome
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...a indigo trail down...
a = an?
I really liked this poem. Some great imagery, and a lovely mood. -
My tongue traces
an indigo trail down
your body... following
the rich color to it's end.
Very colorful indeed.
Brillant, I must say
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Awww you're just saying 'cause I used your name
Thank you for the read and comment...
Ken
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Awesome work my friend!
Well done and good luck to you in this contest!
Jeremy0826 -
exquisite! there are no other words for this.
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Actually, there are many other words for this but none better than "thank you" for reading and commenting
Ken
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Your poem would make any one feel special
with your line .....
“So much better than
a pot of gold”
Riftkin
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Awww thanks JoAnn... I hope it gave you a warm smile...
Ken
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