stimulating-
dredged in the syrup
of chocolate liquid
that fills the ceramic mug,
indifference of clarity swells
heated steam over pernicious
debate within line feeds-
caked with androgynous booms
of intellect and snarky one-liners.
flocked and fueled in bashed
articles-flashed like ripped clothing
naked before the uncaring world-
flayed, frayed-
are thoughts truly so dangerous?
placed to action, only plastic buttons
pressed into deletion-
somnolent issues, once they
get up out of office chairs
and leave their respective
homes.
Author notes
i don't like it. I can write better than this. Welcome to the ww WTF.. 
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I think it is pretty darn good.
if I were to criticize maybe tune down the vocab
to some more common words only a tad!
and try to shorten a few sentences allowing the reader to catch their breath.
I've alwaus felt it is important to make poetry accessible to all yes somehow stimulating to those of a higher degree of education.
That is not always possible but the more people who can enjoy your poetry the more readers you will have and poetry is comunication.
That is my humble opinion I liked this poem truthfully so my criticisms are somewhat mute
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a wonderful poem thank you for sharing
maralisa
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