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If I be the future,
where do I leave the past?
All that these old eyes have seen
and weathered ears have screamed;  
A mind that has gathered its rage.
A heart that has harbored its hate;

The white man with a black belt
that never kept anything up,
serving only to keep me down.

Of words and hands, too harshly felt;
The shadows of feet--
from oak trees, still swinging.
The fear of sheets that silently shift
on soundless Mississippi nights;

How do I sleep on cotton
and not feel the sting of its sweat?
Will you now give me a silken box
to bury all along with me?

Will I suffocate

under its weight forever?
While you shovel light onto darkness,
looking for absolution--

in the blending.

Will you auction off my memories,
like tiny babies
so they can grow up without any;

How can I be the mother of the future,
when I am already a daughter
of the past?

And how will my sons come to forgive,
when their mother can never ever--
let them forget…

 

 

 

 

 

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  • patrick20traveler
    February 25

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    Powerful write. How about a lead box instead of a silken box; would that work better? Not a bit of hope is left in this very sad poem--too bad 'cause everbody needs hope.


  • couldbeworse
    February 25
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    excelllent, poignant, incrediable...need i say more?


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    February 25

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    This Is a beautiful piece of verse, your words just slide across the page with so much ease and grace
    Thankyou for a wonderful read

  • RechercheCadaver
    February 24

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    The questions in this poem, burning with so much hidden hate and old memories. A vivid picture, emotionally stirring and precise, the diction is absolutely perfect. I can tell tthat this was thought out. One thing distracted me, though..."Will you now give me a silken box
    to bury all along with me?

    Will I suffocate

    under its weight forever? " I see the idea behind it, but I think being buried under a silken box doesn't translate too well conceptually. Silk does not bring into mind heaviness. It brings to mind softness and luxury, and here you are talking about being buried under weight. Perhaps I misunderstood though. It's just an opinion however. It didn't take away from the poem and didn't make me enjoy it less. I just wonder about this particular choice of words. Write on. best wishes.


  • pufnstuf
    February 24

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    Angst to the extreme!

    This is at once a very dark and moving piece yet also there is a very small measure of hope trying to rise to the surface. It never does though and the last amazing stanza seems to bury it for good. You have written something very personal, wrestling with a dark emotion, and that is where all the best poems come from. Thanks!!!


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    February 19

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    Oh my this is so deep and poignantly sad. These thoughts are embedded with such truth. There is a \well cloaked hate in this,penned with haunting thoughts. And your last stanza sums it all up amazingly. A very powerful piece here, as are all you poems about the dark side of society.
    Best wishes in the contest hun.
    Gaylene

  • patrick20traveler
    February 13
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    This is a wonderful poem putting forth the question we all must struggle with. I hope you write a follow up with your answer.


  • PoeticMadnesss
    February 13

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    Amazing way to capture how people are often ruled by the choices they've made in their past and can't effectively move into the future. Beautifully written, keep up the great work!

  • This is amazing. It is painful. It is real. It really delves into the issues beneath the issues, and the immense difficulty of escape when everything around seems to be holding you back. The generational passing of experience and wisdom is so strong here--then ending stark and troubling. Really phenomenal.


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    February 12

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    WOW! it has been a while since I read some of your work but this one has blown me away with the dicotomy of the past and present together. Exquisite imagery and thought provoking wording. Power just oozes off of this piece and keeps the reader hanging on for more.

  • SadmanJim
    February 12

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    wow

    THIS is a much better poem, make that much more complex, expressive, heart-rending, evocative poem... than I have read in a LONG time. [I usually read and re-read Ogden Nash]
    As Peteskid mentioned below, I too felt the immediate reference, intentional or not, to Billie and her most controversial song "Strange Fruit".
    But, I also felt like I was reading a Maya Angelou poem... had that kind of "Caged Bird" feel to it in my humble opinion.
    Well, enough prattle! Mostly, this made me wince, think, feel... and doubt what is real.

    Write On!
    jIM


  • watching the time
    February 12

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    wow, this actually gave me chills. Such burning questions. so much emotion put into this. Wonderful poetry, wonderful emotion.


  • Peteskid gold member
    February 12

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    Such profound and troubling questions here, the kind that must be asked and attempted to be answered, one but wonders whether the answers will be as difficult as the questions; the feeling of Billie Holiday here and strange fruit, the awful legacy of a past full of hard lessons, like Langston Hughes, and yet knowing it has all brought us to this place, where we examine life in all of its faults and frailties. Marvelous writing here, imagery with a palpable edge, and insights that cut to the marrow. Excellent. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK

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