I gotta see
I gotta know right now
Whats thats writing on your everything
It isn't near anything at all
No one really cares for it at all
Not that I should care
Early in the morning
it pulls all over my surface
I wanna go back to there
My emotions
and the things that you say
will fall right into place
Like spirit rocks
Flesh and saints
When we die
So sink and lay
as we float away
It really isnt anything at all
Early in the evening
It pulls out and down of my self
I wanted to see
And my emotions
and the things that you said
fell right into place
as drip drops
fall on my face
But I wont stop
While you throw it away
What did you think
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Good write
It sparks the imagination and the heart. It is sad in that nothing should be thrown away when it concerns the heart. The wording is colorful and the flow is good. You may want to proof-read it though. I spotted a point in it where the word "and" was repeated in the same line. Good for something that you plan to work on later though.
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Hey sweetheart! Thanks for the comment I didn't notice the 2 and's so I'll go back and fix that!
Always
jacki
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