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Somebody

It hurts
I don't know how
I can't describe why
But I'm now on week four
maybe five
and it hurts

There's something wrong,
I don't know what
I actually don't care
as long as you can make it
stop.

Please. Stop.
Do something, anything
that isn't run more tests
because I can't breathe because
it hurts
so much.

I don't sleep
I'm not awake
Auto-pilot
is my default state.

I've got a list of symptoms
as long as my arm
surely that must point you
in the right direction
let's not have any
misconceptions,
I'm in pain, and I want it to end
I don't care how you do it
just do it fast
I don't care where, why, how
just do it now.

Somebody, please.
Somebody, help me.

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I need Doctor House. Not kidding.

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  • LovelyTraces
    February 12

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    House would definitely help. (I love him!!)

    Anywho..my favorite part was:

    "I don't sleep
    I'm not awake
    Auto-pilot
    is my default state."

    I love how you made those work together. It sucks that you actually feel like this, though.

    And yah, if they know exactly what's wrong with you symptom-wise, I don't see how they can't tell the name of it and how to make you better.

    It makes no sense. Maybe you should see a good ol' american doctor! XD.