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the emotion of being too low to fall any further


Eyes.
They have eyes
that can cast judgements
fast as vipers
without a sound.
Limitless,
this loneliness
creeps up, only to find
you consume the entire room

                      (this is not where you should be)

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  • Bryan-CarnelianHope
    February 12

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    I don't see how you're to revise this, it's good as is. The imagery is amazing, but with no surprise coming from the Darling Miss Michelle.
    Eerie, powerful, wonderful.