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Snowman Solage

Rolled in three balls of white
top hat, Charcoal eyes, and real sight
---Melting.

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  • Mistress Leala silver member
    February 12

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    Hmm, interesting piece. I wonder who is melting. . Terrific piece.


  • myrataal silver member
    February 11

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    Ah ... I wonder ...

    what IF you should say:

    Rolled in three balls of white
    top hat, Charcoal eyes, AND real sight
    ---Melting.

    Don't you think it would have given a nice twist to this poemie?

    Well done, nevertheless. Poet.
    Love
    Myra