What's more like love than the sun?
impact tremendous;
all life bowing in its presence
Days you yearn to loll in its warmth
body stretched out in its possibilities
others you doubt its potential
curling up in the pith of shadows
Sometimes it leaves an impression on your skin-
barely skimming the surface
or igniting you to the core
Promising
intoxication torment blithe
and
passion ache melancholy
eternally on the other side of the window;
yours for the taking
abrubt arrival,
swift exit
leaving you breathless in its wake
Author notes
le soleil=the sun (in french)
I have this posted on my other account. Just wanted to post it here too. 
twin sister?
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Beautiful work here, I really enjoyed
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wow!!! This is absolutly beautiful! Outstanding piece of work that I can relate to! I love the title, and the imagery is just... Beautiful, equisite. Truly leaving me breathless in it's wake! Thankyou for entering this contest, and I am proud to call you my Twin Sister!
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The first two stanzas were cool, I liked the imagery. The second stanza could have used a punctuation mark, to break the clauses - it would have flowed better that way. Besides that, I thought this was good.
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Thanks. I never know when to use punctuation or anything. :/
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Wow, the title looks so elegant in another laungage. I love the imagery in this....
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