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``I`ll N x E x V x E R be p-e-r-f-e-c-t``
I y+el+l to myself
As i sipp the B00zÉ
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SHUT U
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JuSt Shut U
Author notes
Prompt: Drugs and alchohol
Sami
This is my first attempt at a dirty pretty poem, so i hope i did ok..
In a list
A contest entry
- ◊◊ ÐiŘ↑џ ΡŗШțțŸ ◊◊ by Bean Sidhe.
850 points, ended November 29, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The first comment I have is if you want someone to be able to read this, you might think about changing the background. It's hell on the eyes. The next observation I made is that you need to be a little more creative with your dirty pretty. Use special characters instead of just over punctuating and spacing. Also, if you are going to space your words flowing up or down, remember to go back & edit if they are not just right, otherwise it messes with the fluidity, giving the opposite effect of what you are seeking.
Keep at it though. This is not bad for a first attempt at dirty pretty. It's a unique style & done correctly, it can be a creative asset to your poem.
Nonetheless, thank you for your entry & best of luck to you.
- Bean Sidhe
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This is cool
It's interesting and the inspiration is interesting
Thanks for entering and best of luck
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Thanks for entering and good luck!!
~Abi
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This is really awesome, I love how the words go up instead of across, it paints the poem pretty well. Thank you for your entry.
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wow this is so cool. i love it..
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bout went blind reading this..but I love the colors. lol
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VERY hard to read.. was it intentional or jut a mistake? But it really hurt my eyes - the font colour on that back ground!
It's definately DP and the subject of choice was conveyed by the craziness of that. Well done and thanks for entering
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i dont really like pretty dirty, but i really like this one, your visuals went perfect with the topic, really makes me go back into time
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Strong words and alot of emotion portrayed here.
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Oh yeah
This is awesome, I felt like I was trippin acid as I read.
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This is really good, ecspecially for your very 1st. Keep it up and good luck in the contest!
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this is relly good and i love how the letters are all mixed up and stuff i couldn't do that !!
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for your first dirty pretty write, this is really good. took me a moment to figure out how to read some of the lines, but i thought it was quite clever.
nicely done -
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thank you so much. it was really difficult figuring out how to do this, and i fucked up my keyboard in the process.
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great job!
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cool
i really like that. you have to figure out how to read it, like your mind would be on an acid trip -
excellent dirty pretty!!
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it was cool great job, and poem...KEYBOARD SKILLS!!
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