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Grief

Anguish blackens
Catastrophic truths
Hollow; broken
Erased from lives


{suicide}

Author notes

Sorry...Today is the day dad died 3 yrs ago, 17th feb is official date he was found.. Thought I'd write it out

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  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    June 9

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    Wow this is sad. My mother committed suicide on may 11th 1997. Even though it's been that long ago, I still feel it as if it was yesterday. Sorry for your loss. You did a wonderful job at capturing your emotion. Thank you so much for entering my contest.


  • ItaloEtkin
    April 7
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    this is a good suicide poem


    • DinkyDiver gold member
      April 7
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      thankyou; this was me going through some grief of someone's suicide..


  • perfectsunset gold member
    April 4

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    Ooh deeply dark and empowering.
    This was very well-composed
    and original.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 28

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    This makes me think of how I feel at the moment. Tragic, ever so sad, but really strong. Very expressive.


  • campanaro silver member
    February 12

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    Excellent

    Beautiful yet so sad.
    Thank you for sharing this.
    Wishing you the best.
    Love Peace
    campanaro


  • Mrs D
    February 12
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    DEEP WRITE !!!

    SORRY FOR YOUR LOST


  • Mariana gold member
    February 11

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    This is so sad...I am sorry for your loss. Well done on capturing your emotions in this poem.

    Mariana


  • Luciferschild
    February 11

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    very well spoken and well written. This poem very effectively channeled your pain. thank you for entering and good luck


  • Candy6
    February 11
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    creative

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