i don't want to die
or even think about it
to myself i lie
and don't admitt
that one day i will die
and to everything
i will have to say bye
and never speak or sing
and never touch
and know I'm loved as such
and never know a thing
just endless darkness
or just forever dreaming
some believe in afterlife
but what if its not true
there will be a dead end for you
and soon when your loved ones die too
everyone will forget you
everyone wont be there
only in your memories there will be near
some believe in heaven
but what if its true
there will be hell too
people need to thin this through
i don't know what will happen
i don't always believe
but i know before death begins
i've got my whole life to achieve
A contest entry
- The day you die (not emo) by upperworld06.
700 points, ended February 25, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Death by Anonymous Spark.
400 points, ended March 7, 16 entries
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Comments
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This is really good. I believe death is just a separation. Actually, to me, earthly life is sort of a separation, because we believe we are separated from God.
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people need to thin this through
you forgot the k in think.
other than that, not much i can say. rhyming did seem a bit forced in the beginning but the end is awesome. nice job and good luck -
Your perception for one so young is unbelievable.
And why you would think on the subject of death at such a young age is inconceivable?
You must a be very bright little girl.
But don't worry you have a long time to live.
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