sun scorches
it leaves two possibilities:
growth of new life
or cancerous inflictions
one cannot hide in shadows forever
or behind veils
or under umbrellas and sun screens
become moth
kiss
the flame
then:
shrivel
in truth
Author notes
Option 5: the sun
In a list
A contest entry
- Keep It Short (prompts) by MacDad.
850 points, ended February 11, 2009, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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clever
be very quick with that kiss. clever words M, how bold they are.
Bill
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In the Gospel of St Thomas, there is a quote from Christ saying;
"Let him who seeks continue seeking until he finds. When he finds, he will become troubled. When he becomes troubled, he will be astonished, and he will rule over the All."
Being troubled is part of the process. The analogy I like to use is one of moving from a dark room to a well-lit one. It is troubling until our eyes adjust, then we see much better than before. This is a brilliant poem.
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Myra's masochistical mystilogical side
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This reminds me of Rumi, the metaphor of burning in love for an end we cannot see. Yet, how can it be bad? Your brevity gives the images a kick.
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Powerful perception, some light feels great.
I love the imagery here.
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Great! This is one of my favorites: kiss the flame. We must have a rage to live, before life slips away.
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I agree with your words, Kiss the flame. Good luck in the contest
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Brilliant writing...awesome. Blessings.
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Oh my! This is great! This is something that affects us here in South Florida and is always on our mind so I read this poem literally and not metaphorically. I prefer not to “kiss the flame” and shrivel. This is brilliant my friend.
Love,
Amera♥
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For some reason your poem made me think of Jimi Hendrix' Purple Haze. Probably because of what is written in the fourth stanza (kiss the flame - which is kiss the sky in the song). There are more parallels with the song, although from entirely different perspectives, you may both have been writing from a vision of the same event. Thank you, precious Muse, for creating and sharing and the best of luck in the contest. Ack.
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Well said !
( even as I disagree with the concept )
" (HE) would have us hot or cold. Lukewarm, would spew us out of his mouth".
I'm more of the cold type. (lol)
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That which burns like insistent moths to a flame can also burn when choice made is wrong. The messages you write are often so clear it's uncanny C
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