Mischievous eyes, magical smile
beneath the veil, your heart fragile
mysterious girl, your silent self,
beneath the clamour an' the noisy elf
angel-like style, your divine trail
the hearts you break, as you smoothly sail
the life you bring to the lonely ones
to love you I need no reasons
My heart can read your need to cry
On my shoulders can you rely
I will be there when you are down
I let you not in the miseries drown
Pure is your heart, pure is your mind
there isn't any of your kind
I love you O' beauty divine
will you be my pretty valentine
A contest entry
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I LOVED THE DIVINITY POURING OUT OF UR WORDS...
AWESOME...
GOOD LUCK
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Thanx 4 entering. Good luck. - cgirl0410
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No
Not that my opinion matters, lol!...
I agree with Laura, but if it were up to me, in the end I wouldn't have let you through. This didn't have the imagery and metaphor I wanted. It was kind of cliche too.
But...
prove me wrong in boot camp.
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yes.
Laura makes a good point. But make sure to work on your content (imagery, metaphor) when you go through this.
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Hmmm...Yes.
I deliberated here...yet your discipline where flow and rhythm is concerned, allows me to know that you have potential, hence my decision.
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CUTE!!!! oh, if i got a poem like this, it would make me fall in love in a second! wonderful write. i loved it.
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