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Bellingham Bay

I came home to visit, and you
just happened to conveniently
be in the vicinity, shortly before
you'd decide to go to California
and study to be a nurse...

We went to one of the scenic
parks on Bellingham Bay - I can
never remember the name...
we went off together, scrambling
for the less populated shoreside,

And there, we just spent time
together, our pants rolled up to
our calves, picking pretty stones
and shells out of the tidewater.
You had a foreboding about you -

I didn't know it would be our last
meeting as friends, as quickly as
you left for Sacramento shortly
thereafter; had I known that,
I would have dropped the shells,

The stones, the sea glass in the
sand and spent more time talking
as friends; one last hug later at the
Cliffhouse restaurant to say goodbye,
and that was the last I saw of you.

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  • Swan song gold member
    February 25
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    this poem was replete in longing
    an excellent narrative poem and heartfelt


  • Mr Id
    February 16

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    This has a sort of ethereal dreaminess about it. One cannot engage with it too fully- it is like seeing a scene unfold in real life, but not having any ability to intereact with any part of it.

    This has an interesting, slightly uneasy feel to it.

    Excellent work!

  • HollyLouise
    February 16

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    This is a very beautiful poem. It tells a story very well and flows perfectly. It is really sad though. I think in everyones lives there is something we wish we could change.

    truly beautiful.

    thank you for sharing this.

    Keep writing,
    Holly.


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    February 15

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    This brings back memories of time we spent in Bellingham and Washington State. I especially love the middle stanza.

  • oldpoets
    February 15

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    Too many words within this write. It did not flw well. Never the less it was interesting and easy to read. You told a story bur so does prose,


  • GotLilt
    February 15
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    love the last stanza. We all wish we could redo some things in our lives.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    February 15
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    Beautiful.
    Tis kind of sad, yet really beautiful.
    Joe


  • Tirrell
    February 11

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    I love the gentle imagery, as it builds you can feel the remorse and still the love. A beautiful and well composed poem.


  • hamid
    February 11

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    nice

    Nice poem although the poet did not follow the ryhmes and meters but the main idea is good. Good w2ork peot keep it up
    Ali


    • ourgirlFriday
      February 11
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      I did not see a rule for rhymes and meters; but then, you learn something new everyday.

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