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Forty words of Summer

Summertime...
brings Volleyball,
happiness, intoxication.

Baseball game, played on the
beach…
… bare feet.


...nonsense...
Bright and airy,
held her hand
with zealous,
in shorts and tan.

      Young, desired freedom,
              gained,
      in increasing increments .


Sunday…
bright, light,
omnipresent,
splendid, spiritual; reigns...

Author notes

this was a challenge...lol...at least I made it one!
Thanks great fun!

20 words used from America's got a lot of Balls
bright and airy,
Summertime brings Baseball;
Volleyball, played on the beach,
In bare feet, shorts and tan
Sunday young
freedom


~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
20 words used from Criminal to Patient
reigns.
Splendid, spiritual
light.
Happiness
Game increments
omnipresent.
gained.
held her hand...with zealous.

Intoxication in Desired
increasing gratitude
nonsense

http://allpoetry.com/poem/5051364
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3265280


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  • harriet567
    February 19, 2009
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    I like this combination of your 2 poems. I love the short phrases - better than in the prewrites, I think. It brings a feeling of energy conveyed by the game of beach ball with bare feet! Also the last verse is good describing the spiritual context of Sunday. The title is good and the whole poem flows well.