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Silhouette On Burnt Maroon

Silhouette
Burnt maroon gazes back into her gray toned eyes,
her shadow etched into the wall in a charcoal sketch,
arms above her head reaching up the clouds just to feel there cotton touch;
her feet planted to the ground; sprouting her imagination,
Her shadow etched into the wall in a charcoal sketch,
burnt maroon gazes back into her gray toned eyes.
Silhouette

Author notes


INSPIRATION
for me this was inspired by a day when i was on a walk by a brick wall an i saw my silhouette on and shadow and how it looked so different yet so alike and just sprouted my inspiration on this poem.
-~-~- Word prompt: Silhouette

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  • Cherry Hades
    March 23
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    Very nice. A greatly discriptive piece.

    Cheers


  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    February 20

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    I wasn't sure what to expect when I clicked on this but it's a very interesting title choice

    Loved the lines >> "Her shadow etched into the wall in a charcoal sketch,
    burnt maroon gazes back into her gray toned eyes."

    Wonderful write,
    thank you for entering!
    Claire x


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    February 16

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    such a stunning write! I agree with chiefmac's comment. Great layout and burnt maroon? thats fab.. creative!

  • chiefmac
    February 16

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    This a feel almost as if it were form poetry. The refrain work excepitionally well as the reader grabs the images to parallel them up and down in mirror image. Thanks for the rea


  • charcoal
    February 12

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    burnt maroon... has a nice sound.

    this is an interesting format

    "her shadow etched into the wall in a charcoal sketch"

    i like that a lot. never thought of shadows as charcoal sketches. creative and unique.


    i like the pose as you've described it in the following 2 lines

    "arms above her head reaching up the clouds just to feel there cotton touch;
    her feet planted to the ground; sprouting her imagination"

    so when you say


    "the sun shines down on her ivory skin reflecting all memories one played out"

    i have to do a mental switch coz so far i was thinking of a silouette and now you've moved to the person...
    ( i would play with this line to make it relate to the shadow and if i can't, then remove it to make the poem stronger )

    just what i thought, when i read this.

    once again, the title is beautiful. burnt maroon... so good.

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