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Sandy Ridge Expedition




How can I transport this place
for you to hold; and feel,
and breathe, into your soul

Without photos,
painting or drawing?
(such is what's called for)

I'll tell you how we need this sanctuary;
here it is, midday
amidst the brush

Cranberry toned leaves climb;
handsome tresses alongside
pine tufts

Amber, silvery bark;
verdure, rustling variety.

Yellow, lime mixes of color,
the blue and white breeze,
green domes.

Perhaps this tropical forest
may as well be sketched
by what is NOT present

No Walgreens, no Burger King;
no 'one way' signs nor traffic lights
instructing a being on turns
left or right.

Just spiral snail shells,
sea grape leaves;
things crunchy
and creepy.

Stillness,
movement,
bright clearings,
air plants


(Crushed beer cans?!
these we shall ignore;
as we are high on nature, yes?
alrighty, then...) 


Further on this less traveled,
though more sacred road,
a gopher tortoise
stands by his burrow.

Near wheat-like grasses,
nooks and crannies

Beautiful weeds;
butterflies overseeing

Fan-shaped fronds so vast, they
can barely believe their radiance.

Tendrils, tree stumps,
black serpents in the shrubs.

Understory, overgrowth,
softness and skeletons

Secrets, tall tales,
lavender crosses,
Stars of David

Yellow hearts so bright; and
sundown like the last precious bites
of lemon meringue pie.




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  • Abnormal
    June 27

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    I liked the colours in this, the poem is nicely written. Good job, thanks for entering and best of luck.


  • Princess-Petunia
    February 21

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    wonderful

    thankyou for taking me on your nature trail, I've just seen some wonderful things there. what a wonderful journey and thankyou for my comment

  • poets whisper
    February 15

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    nothing like crushed beer cans to spoil nature. Why can't people carry their trash out with them ... better yet find a trash can or something; re-cycle. But I digress ... this was filled with imagery and I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for entering


  • Whispers of Hope
    February 13
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    This is so well written beautiful piece here!

  • Eusebius
    February 13

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    ah, many, many sharp visuals here, with colors, colors galore! Yes, I'd say all in all a most pleasant expidition, indeed...

  • Bruce silver member
    February 12

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    I thought the descriptions of fauna and flora were brilliant. Also liked the what's not there section. I thought the parentheses detracted, rather than added to the mood. Overall - SUPER!

  • patrick20traveler
    February 11
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    I like the images and the gentle humor.

  • ocerus
    February 11

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    I liked this but it did seem to run on. However the last line was superb and seemed to adroitly tie everthing together. - ocerus


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    February 11

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    nice

    This is a nice poem you have, I really liked it until you talk about the serpent. I love the nature of this poem, butterflies, in the rain forests it is beautiful. It was a pleasure to read.


    • Simply Olivia
      February 11
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      I did see a black snake near my car, just before I left the park. It held itself so still; at first, I thought it was a garden hose or something like that.


  • Emmyb gold member
    February 11

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    i like this

    well done on this entry. i could feel myself being transported there!
    i especially liked your little joke about the beer cans half way through. well done on this. emma.

  • Going Forever
    February 11

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    What a good poem for me to read!
    I hope lots of people will enjoy this poem and click on your work!!!!!
    I don't see many people writing poems about transport.... this is very interesting

    Have a wonderful day

    Rose Fairy

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