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when the end has already begun...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I tongue truth's

tiny tinctures

inside depths of your deceits

 

and so you cream me curdled

within tide's calming tread

 

and I spread sideways,

preparing flight

for finer achievements,

while destinations dance mockingly

between fish-eyes

 

and caviar.

 

My starvation hunts rejection,

 

flinging defiance

inside wind's chill,

to circle calamities with inept abilities

 

and I pray for prey

to dare to rise,

focusing spines

against statuesque stares.

 

This wooden world

is splintered

 

and flints of thought

merely pass it by;

sky melds meekly

into sea's old shades

 

whilst I dive

into predicted outcomes--

 

soon earth shall know aridity

and sun

will scorch skeletal remains

that smudge pains

only on beds...

 

of sheep

and non-believers.

 

My wings are almost ready

to sing of flight,

drawing treble-clef claims

inside instinct's arms

 

and I hum hysteria

to lesser fools:

 

be good to the breath

that belittles you,

for two-thirds of life

shall perish

before day is nigh

 

and fish...

 

will rot

within mankind's demise.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Heroesrox
    March 3

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    This is long, but nonetheless lovely. I liked every bit of this. I usually pick a favorite stanza from people's pieces that I read, but I cannot from this one. Thanks so much for entering! Hope you have fun in this contest chain!


  • liltandrhyme silver member
    February 13

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    This is definitely a 'keeper'. I've read it three times now, and the tingles just keep on coming.

    Picking a favourite stanza is impossible, it changes with each read.

    Delicious phraseology and resonance, the sublime alliteration of the first line sets the tone, I knew I was in for a treat from the start

    "I hum hysteria to lesser fools" - I'm so glad you let this line stand proud, one of the most magical lines I have ever had the pleasure to read.

    This is a special piece of poetry.

    PJ


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    February 13

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  • Yvette Champ gold member
    February 13

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    An assertive voice resonates from your poetry, I liked the metaphor and the inherent message. Sing it sister!


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    February 13
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    Very impressive!! Wishing you all the best in the contest!! Peace, xx Cyn


  • Hetha gold member
    February 12

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    As per usual, your depth and perception has always floored me. Even "squished" as you put it, you still have a powerful voice that rings nothing but truth.


  • sideways hourglass
    February 11

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    "soon earth shall know aridity
    and sun will scorch skeletal remains
    that smudge pains only on beds
    of sheep and non-believers."
    -true that.

    And the ending was perfect.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    February 11

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    Oh my that last stanza is so powerful, true and sad. Would be nice if life could accept diversity.
    Best wishes with this La
    Gaylene


  • delightfulmess silver member
    February 10

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    and I hum hysteria to lesser fools:
    be good to the breath that belittles you, *oggle*
    I absolutly adore those 2 lines

    As always great writing friend. I have missed you
    Delila


    • Laura Lamarca gold member
      February 11
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      P.S. Your profile picture, is that a Mark Spain painting? (cos if it is, then I want it )

      • delightfulmess silver member
        February 11
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        I honestly dont know It sure looks like it but I found it at photobucket. And have not been able to find the artist who painted it. I have even checked a few Mark Spain web sights. I love that pic.


    • Laura Lamarca gold member
      February 10
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      I've missed you too...greatly. I'm glad you're back

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