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I Pleaded

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I begged, I cried,

as tasteless tears detoxify.

 

My dim, dried out pupils,

lost their emerald light.

 

I‘d climb up prayers,

to liquefy my spiritual sight.

 

Icicles, lacerate thin skin,

piercing me perfectly numb.

 

Fading in a faithless soul,

silenced in the shadows of a rose.            I pleaded…

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  • The Fun House silver member
    February 22

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    I must admit to being distracted by the candles in reading the last part of this. However, the poem was good. I enjoyed it and it does have some nice imgaery to it as well. Lovely job here.


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    February 16

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    oh damn...just beautiful!!!

    I'm sorry but it made me speechless


    Fly Shy


  • memoriesofyou
    February 14

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    wow

    your background matches your poem perfectly. The theme is astonishing. You have a great mind for this subject!


  • Jalalbad gold member
    February 14

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    My dim dried pupils lost their emerald light...
    beautiful as only you can write poeticweaver.
    It is my opinion that we have poor judges in AP and I don't give a damn what they think. This poem is pure gold. Happy Valentines day poet.
    Love,
    Judy


  • PoJonez
    February 11
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    Beautiful piece.
    Simple.
    Powerful.
    thank you for sharing this piece with everyone!


  • Titus gold member
    February 11

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    I'm impressed. much here, not dictated by exprsssionism as such, which forms around us, by these words of yours, as immensely content, and abundantly so full of peace. Plead be not the case, only those reading this will compromise. I only comment on writes worthy of some honorary degree. Titian


  • Wandika gold member
    February 11
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    Terribly sad Timothy.

    But well done.

    Jim


  • EeyoreUK
    February 11
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    so very deep my friend and so moving. you trully are a poet worth reading.


  • Lonely
    February 11

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    Plead, now is that a very painful word. and so well written poem here Tim, it was so unique, as this was the first word that came to my mind. Awesome baby.. I loved this one, keep writing

    Love ya,
    Lonely


  • ScottishPrincess silver member
    February 11

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    I am glad I clicked on this,such a great poem filled with imagery,what more can I say other than I love this!,keep penning,Regards,Hazel


  • wynd-fyre
    February 11
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    OOOH! such imagery! I like this one a lot!, Short, Succinct, to the point!, Good job, keep at 'er!


  • rite
    February 11

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    Contest assignments such as this one I find difficult to do, but you have managed to imagine an intense poem from it. The despair from efforts unrewarded speaks from the words. Kudos, brother, I wish you the best of luck in the contest. I enjoy your creativity. Take care.

  • patrick20traveler
    February 11

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    Great word choice. I really liked "My dim, dried out pupils,/lost their emerald light." Very consistent throughout.

  • HollyLouise
    February 11

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    This is so powerful. You have used such beautiful words to make this poem.

    My favourite lines are:

    as tasteless tears detoxify.


    My dim, dried out pupils,

    lost their emerald light.



    And:

    silenced in the shadows of a rose. I pleaded…

    These particular lines i thought made the poem so special.
    This was an amazing poem, thank you for sharing.

    Keep writing,
    Holly.


  • Angelflower
    February 11

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    I believe this is one of the most powerful poems I have read from you..you pore so much of yourself into this write.. it makes me smile sadly because well. hell you have written what my heart feels it seems sometimes really heartfelt and touching.. life doesn't always seem worth living eh? yet here we are.. breathing.. sucks sometimes..lol.. but hey, I'll struggle through and I'll help pick you up when you fall... a truly wonderful write baby boy..

    Angel


  • queenie
    February 10

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    when i saw this contest you came to mind. i just knew you could nail it and with this one word you have woven yet another masterpiece. the power of the rose spreads its scent all over this. you are a rose and a winner.


  • cLaSsiX
    February 10

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    very few words were used in this piece, but it is no less powerful than a poem that has many stanzas. the words you chose and the way you used them, went together perfectly.

    "Fading in a faithless soul,

    silenced in the shadows of a rose. I pleaded…"

    very deep, and it cranks my mind into thinking gear.


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    February 10
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    Word utilized very well. Awesome piece as always. Thanks for the share.


  • Stardust-luvr
    February 10

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    my dear dear bro this sends tears of cleansing prayers in hope that burdens are relinquished - know you are a rose in a bouquet of friends whom are here everlasting . they love you almost as much as I do and our petals envelope you with love and peace like a rainbow silencing the dew drop tears of ours' and your soul. you are in my heart and shall shine with magnifiscent glory . well done and many blessings always xxxxx


  • kaibab silver member
    February 10

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    He heard you Bro...
    or was it she in mountain mist of magic tree,
    such a prayer to cleanse and grow
    when winter tires of ice and snow,
    and sun grows warmer inspiration...

    a beautiful prayer ...


  • smiley
    February 10

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    wow

    this was amazing to read... I really loved this piece. it spoke volumes of truth and desperate meaning... good luck in this contest....

    Yvonne


  • poet2angels gold member
    February 10

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    Oh, Bro this is breathtaking....sad and beautifully penned...Such hauntingly gorgeous language!

    "Fading without a faithful soul,

    silenced in the shadows of a rose. I pleaded…"

    Always amazing you are

    Sis Lynda


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    February 10

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    kool

    very nice picture. I like the spritual sight, Faithful soul. Wonderful flow of words, This is great and a wonderful read

  • BodomBuddy
    February 10
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    nice poem. i really like your choice of words. i love the imagery.

  • LovingPhoenix
    February 10
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    Absolutely beautiful!


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    February 10

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    So very intense, my brother...wow
    Your heart lays bared in this piece so much so that, wow, you take one's breath away...
    I wish you light, love, and happiness to guide your path
    Hugs to you

    Sandy

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