My indecision squirming,
throat still choking on
words of complication,
painted in your eyes.
The memory wearing thin,
years floating in-between,
envisioning strangled dreams
when I last heard your voice.
Author notes
Chosen Prompt:
Prompt 3:
Still a little bit of your taste in my mouth
Still a little bit of you laced with my doubt
Still a little hard to say what's going on
Stones taught me to fly
Love taught me to lie
Life taught me to die
So it's not hard to fall
When you float like a cannonball
-Damien Rice
30 written words exactly.
A contest entry
- Float Like A Cannonball by Jfd.
650 points, ended February 24, 2009, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
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I was going to pick out my favorite line and comment on it, but i realized I enjoyed this poem in its entirety, great job from begining to end, loved where you took the prompt! thanks for taking the time to enter
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Many thanks. I thought at first it might be a difficult prompt, but it was a good prompt, enjoyed working with it.
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Fits the prompt very well! It also reminded of the song "Lips of Angel" by Hinder. Either way it is a terrific write!
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Many thanks, glad you enjoyed it.
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A wonderful piece here and you did so well with the prompt! I enjoyed this read and good luck to you hon
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Thanks very much.
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