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To My Humanity

 

 

 

Ha!

 

 

 

 ...I laugh

'cause limited insight

  hides my voice

        from my own ears.

 

 

 

 

Oh, disconnected self from eternal strings,

 

let's laugh together

 at our plight,

 

  let's drink together,

      'cause we know we've thrown away

 

 

everyone else-

 

 

let's drown

in honor

of ourselves,

of ourselves,

ourselves,

ourshells...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • WithinYourEyes
    February 23

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    This is a very interesting piece. I liked the set up of the poem a lot. It was fun to read! Congrats on Gold!!!!


  • Skybow silver member
    February 21
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    Congratulations on the Gold, your poem was so good I thought it should win. Loved it!!!


  • Loki silver member
    February 20

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    I liked the play on words at the end of this. The overall format was quite cummingsish. Very enjoyable. Thank you for entering.