From deep within my verses flow
And run a river of endless love
For my dear brother that angels know
For the only friend I told stars of
And I hope this time my words will show
How much I care and let him see
That love will stay and never go
And my love for him is air for me.
A man was sent to me by Fate,
By a strike of luck to stand by me
So Time, please don't rush and wait
Before he leaves the land for the sea
One day he'll be where I am not
Where the sea's son can be free
And I swear by God I'll miss him a lot
Cause he's my world and will always be
I blame the sea for taking him away
Taking my life, sea, can't you see?
You can take the body, the soul will stay
The soul is mine and will stay with me.
And though I know it will be hard
To keep the smile when he's not here
But I will struggle and try so hard
To keep on smiling and save my tears
And now before the journey starts
I hope he'll read these words I write
But words are useless, they can't explain
And can't ensure when things are right
Words and tears, they're both in vain
Like a flame-less candle at the darkest night
I'll let my words have a last try
Explain things confused your minds
How an angel once appeared as a guy
Who'll always be the best friend of mine
A brother I had through Good and Bad,
Through my pain and tears
He was there for me with a helping hand
And a tender voice that filled my ears
With the warmest words whenever I'm sad
He taught me things I never knew
How pain inside can turn to joy
Like a cloudy sky becoming blue
Above the heads of a girl and a boy
He made me learn dreams come true
But all we need is a magical smile
He makes me feel how close we are
Though between us lie the many miles
He's the closest one though he's far
My dear brother the best friend of mine
I imagine him, his lovely eyes
And there I see "A friend for life"
Author notes
for my brother.
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firstly you have used a very intellegent rhyming system here and its very admirable to see. Your opening lines are really captivating and interesting, enticing us to read more of the poem. the theme is lovely, and really beautifully portrayed. well done on this piece. well done well done. Emmyb
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Thank you, glad to read your comment, it's so much appreciated.
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just great.
a very fine tribute to your brother..very can ever match it...very beautiful indeed.
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Thank you
How are you by the way?
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Just great.
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Beautiful.
If I were your brother I would be very proud of this work and of you for being a precious loved one.
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Thank you, my big brother Kerry
happy now? 
I love you vely vely vely vely vely muchy
Tc!
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im sorry, i couldnt give you a verdict. its hard to discribe somthing when so many words come to mind. i know that sounds silly... but they all want a chance to rate your poem.
'I imagine him, his lovely eyes
And there i see "A friend for life"'
The last verse lately has never ment alot to me, but that was perfect. You brought Emotion, Feeling, Many of the things we expect in a poem. Best of all.. you didnt let it get away from you and out of control. you brought it all together in the end with that beautiful verse.
i absolutley loved it, and i know he will too .
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Thank you teddy bear very happy to read this comment I hope Eddy bear will like it too
Meow!
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Whoa.....
Very touching.....made me think of my brother. I think this is an extremely well written poem that has a glorious flow to it! I would have to say the last and first stanzas are me personal favorites. They show how being close to someone (be it family or friend) they can help teach you things and show how much they care for you in return. If that makes any sense at all! But this is a very nice poem that touches the heart because it can be turned into something personal for a lot of people with someone special in their life. Great poem!!! KEEP WRITING!!!!!!!!
Maggie 
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Oh, thanks Maggie Glad you liked it
Meow!
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It's so refreshing to see a positive emotion in a poem. Liked the image of a " flameless candle at the darkest night" intimating the futility of love at times. I hope he stays with you through "good and bad" as that's the mark of a true friend. Good luck x
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Thanks, Tony and sorry, the poem was cut but fixed now..
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This is really good sis ^^
I'm sure Eddy will love it...great write...
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Thanks, sis.. I hope he'll like it, and I don't know why the poem was cut... Fixed it now..
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