You go off in the sunset
with him
while i can't figure out what
i did wrong.
I'll never understand
what made you go off
with him.
But its over and done with now
I cant take the pain of looking
into your eyes and seeing you with
my best friend.
I guess i'm just a little
to not over you.
Author notes
This poem was inspired by A Little to not over you by David Archuleta
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LOVED THIS.
hehe. an awesome take on the song! this pome just sums up so much in so little words. 
everyone will always love their first crush no matter if things went wrong. I loved the emotions in this. WOW! BRAVO! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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i can realte to this Well done!
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Im not over you.....I was in your shoes before, Its painfu i know good write
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You're great. I don't know how anyone could ever do something like thast to you. It is really emotional.
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this is really good.... great work.. and very sad concept indeed.. this stuff happens alot. if that girl goes and does that.. its her thats stupid.
Thanks for entering my contest,
and best of luck!
Your judge,
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aww devil...
this was awesome!!! i loved it! this poem really does say it all; everyone will always like their first true love or crush even if things do go wrong. i thought that this was amazing; i felt myself just being swept into it like the song itself. i've heard this song, and it is a good one. also, as holly said, it shows how hurtful it can be to lose someone, and then a little while later see them happy with someone else, and walk off and leave you standing in the sunset. keep up the good work! yours is really good devil, and i enjoy reading them. keep writing!
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I like it, the feeling of losing someone, and not understanding how they could just walk off with someone else.
Keep writing,
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hmmm... I liked it
the chorus need a bit more
lol but what do I know
good job
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