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Illusion

I broke down
I'm dejected
I'd never before felt so rejected
I watched you change
First went your eyes
They were so cold they killed the fire I felt inside
You were so different after a mere second in time
I wonder if you were ever real
Or if this love I feel
Is all in my mind

In an instant you were much less than a lover
Far short of a friend
Two words away from being an enemy
Too close to the end

I feel the colour drain from my face...

One sideways look from you
Destroys the courage I had built
I question everything I felt
I'm confused by what any of this is about
Its all an illusion
Everything that I've seen
Never imagined you'd be so disloyal to me
I should be happy to see you leave
But my heart is dead weight
I'm utterly dismayed

I feel the colour drain from my face...

While I watch you walk away.

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Dismay

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  • Rashida
    February 10, 2009

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    Ahhh. We've all been here a time or two, and you captured it rather perfectly. I love the repitition in "I feel the colour drain from my/your face" Very vivid!