Finding myself fine
floundering free,
( - )
A contest entry
- 5 word quickie yall [PIF] by Luciferschild.
500 points, ended February 9, 24 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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nice but i kinda dont under stand it but thats okay i still love it
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Thanks for the comment.
To help clarify, it was writen for a contest where you could only use five words, so that (-) at the end I tried to use as a "insert title here."
So it should read like:
Finding myself fine
floundering free,
-and that scares me.
What I mean to say by this piece is the concept that
Free Will is Not Freedom.
In the poem, I'm realizing I'm living life anywhichway with no direction, and that revealation, once consious of it, is a scary thought.
That when we live for ourselves we're ultimately going to blow ourselves up in an explosion of vices.
... Kind of hard to express in five words.
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which begs the question of why does that scare you? I liked the optimism in this but somehow your fear was communicated effectively. great job
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