Aching arms cradle a child with care.
He carries her limp form in an attempt
to find salvation while he’s unaware
that she no longer feels pain or contempt
from an indifferent world. She’s now exempt
from the hatred and cruelty of war.
Turning from fear, her spirit preempts
further suffering. She’s now free to soar.
Soon a father’s heartbreak will rip the air
and join the echoes of a world in despair.
Author notes
Prompt: Picture B
Picture Credit: “War” www.photobucket.com
7 – 77 lines
Form: Decuain (deck-won) - a form created by Shelley A. Cephas, consists of one stanza of 10 lines; each line contains ten syllables written in iambic pentameter; there are only three rhymes in the stanza, with the following options for rhyme scheme: ababbcbcaa, ababbcbcbb, or ababbcbccc
A contest entry
- ...Who Can Say Why Your Heart Sighs... by Desire.
1221 points, ended February 13, 2009, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome
Comments
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Dark Echoes
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times~ I am Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest You took the prompt and ran with it~ Bravo!!
When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~ I have to say- when I read Your words~
My eyes swelled at the last four lines and they grabbed- pulled at the Heartstrings I kept also seeing images from Darfur- genocide and strange as it sounds Croatia- rows of pale skin- lifeless-scenes of violence against children
Swells the eyes for the children suffer and parents are left burying their treasures~ before their time I am not familiar with this form and Thank You for the description- Words weaved, I would not have thought it was in a specific form- tight rhyme- Impressive
~ Love the direction You took this prompt
Hopefully my words make some sense
Powerful verse and message You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled-
Soon a father’s heartbreak will rip the air
and join the echoes of a world in despair..
Emotional Voice spoken~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit
also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
with much love and light~ Desire~*~
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Oh wow... Ken this was sad
Loved how you took that picture and ran with it. Yes indeed similar we did pen.
Good luck to you
Love
Passions
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