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Redemption

Ocean-like prayers roar

Over a “heart-shaped sea-floor”-

Cry of redemption.

Pearls falling from oyster eyes

Smile at salvation.

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  • Sharon Marie gold member
    August 22

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    beautiful words expressing..

    Pearls falling from oyster eyes that is so lovely,and our prayers roar over a heart shaped floor. sweet and delightlful!

    Blessing sharon


  • Just-Meghan
    February 26
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    Very good. There's not musch i can say about it other than its great!


  • Aun Ali
    February 11

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    hah! interestingly interesting redemption my dear, its great to see the great pen sharing greatness again after a great furlong of time.

    However the 'Ocean-like prayers' is a good adjective that you innovated. The delicate part of this word is the hyphen, if you remove it the statement will become a similie, and the meaning will change. A careful vocabulary is it, yes it is.


    • SabaSophiya
      February 11
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      Dear Aun,
      Thanks for your kind comment!
      Blessings always.......