dear God
today was one of those days
where the world was twisting me around
like a child on a merry go round
but as I sat there
finally quiet and everything stopped spinning
and I didn't feel dizzy anymore
I felt you touching my soul.
it hurt a little bit at first,
because I know its messy down there
and I don't really want to pull it up into the light.
you were bright, and my eyes had to shut
my lashes squeezing my cheeks
as if they were holding on for dear life
but I know that this darkness scares me even more
and I needed to come out of hiding.
I felt like a dirty cup with molding liquid sloshing around inside
the sticky smell stuck into the crevices at the bottom.
your hands smelled of fresh pine
they felt cool to the touch as they encircled my face and my heart and my soul suddenly felt like the pins binding it to the shadows were finally taken out and i could breath again.
this isn't the first time you have tugged me out and towards you
still you surround me like bark on a tree
your arms tender and they smell of sap and fresh mountain air.
God
I have so often wished that you would talk to me
face to face
so I can see your teeth
and the smile on your face
but instead all I know is that this sunshine that you beam on my face
is your gentle way of saying that you are watching me
forgiving me
loving me.
Author notes
Thank you God for taking me back, for holding me to You, for loving me.
(Help Me Feel Again)
A contest entry
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I honestly dont like reading about religion. However this truly touched me, the heartfelt way that you could feel it written was amazing. This is amazing, thank you for entering it my contest, I'm glad i got to enjoy it.
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while re-reading the final entries, i am finding things that i didn't realize the first time or so i read them.
I already said that i'm not a religious person, but the honesty of the moment you read about is something i would personally like to discover.
thanks again.
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Bandits United!!!
This piece is perfect in the way that it shows how one person can be so touched by their own faith. I really respect that
I am SO sorry the bandits message is late, but better late than never
Shari
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I like this poem. It shows a closeness to God through faith.
Thank you very muchfor your entry.
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Awesome write here
I so loved this poem of yours and the warmth of its message Bravo
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"it hurt a little bit at first,
because I know its messy down there
and I don't really want to pull it up into the light." I LOVED this stanza! There's so much pain and hurt and fear rolled up into these few words. I also loved the metaphor of the carousel in this first stanza. I'm usually not one for inspiration or religious poetry, but your imagery won my heart. Bravo!
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I really love what you wrote. Great testimony for Gods love. Nice contemporary poem. Thank you and God bless.
Angel
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BANDITS UNITED WOW
Love a prayer poem!
A really fine one, too, that calms a person and brings on a peace that we all need so much.
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I found the line "finally quiet and everything stopped spinning" profound in the idea of taking a moment to reassess and block the things we distract ourselves with. I also liked the way this poem flowed like it was simply a train of thought rather than getting caught up in trying to fit into a structure. Cheers
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This is a very spiritual poem that brings us all closer to God and shows how he cares for us day in day out even when we are at our lowest ebb. I liked your choice of language and although it is a very personal poem I think it is one that many people will be able to relate to. Best of luck in the contest.
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A breathe of fresh air, this is waht I felt as I read,
one of the greatest gifts of all is written here, we say thank you for taking me back but, really he has never left us... very touching for me
Enjoy your spotlight
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Bandits United !
This is a humble, honest expression of humility, praise and thanksgiving. The contrast and the deeply personal imagery enrich this poem and give it life and deep meaning. I was blessed by reading and contemplating these thoughtful and thought provoking words. Thank you for sharing your words and your heart dear poet.
Write On!
You have been Spotlighted by your Poetic bandit family today because WE CARE!
Brother Dennis
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Wow!this is tremendously beautiful I'd like to read it again at a time when i'm down and low, when i'm blue and lonely, when i'm misunderstood and in a little pain but it's all the more beautiful to read it now~ i think it makes you feel closer to what you tend to ignore for so long and this....it has made a nice read. I feel blessed
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BANDITS UNITED: This is your day in the spotlight; enjoy. LOved the sentiments you expressed in these lines- easy to read and understand, for me anyway. Think we often feel like this; like He as rescued us and given us a new lease on life. When we are down and out He is there to guide us, to show us the way to a better place.
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Lovely inspiring words with beautiful imagery... and the result is a poem that makes me glad.
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This is a beautiful poem I really like the love and devotion in your poetic voice - and the personal details make it all the more powerful well done!
Polly
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Ah...although I am not a religious person, this startlingly beautiful piece touched even my doubting soul! Now THAT is a compliment of the very best kind, believe me!
I love your similies, breathing three dimensional life into your words, and how you bring all your senses into the piece.
Lovely, lovely, lovely!
Enjoy your day to shine in our Bandit spotlight!
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A beautiful prayer full of humility and gratitude for our faithful, merciful God. Great description of sin and also of divine unconditional love and forgiveness. A courageous, honest write.
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Great write
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God is forgiving and he is always there. I tak to him all the time. I feel better after I talkto HIM. Best of luck to you in the contest. -
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This is written in such beautiful, touching metaphors of our Lord's way of reaching out to us when we have strayed from His path and the amazing number of times He will do it for us. . . until we no longer even want to stray. Praise the Lord, that day does come; yet, it is a difficult path, for Satan consistently throws boulders in the way, hoping we will simply turn away instead of climbing over or going around.
This felt like music to my ears and reassuring warmth to my mind and heart. God has blessed you with a golden quill to pen for Him.
Luv & hugs in Christ, BonnieQ
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This is such an amazing poem, filled with remarkable imagery It is very refreshing to read this poem filled with the hope of salvation for lost souls who have dirtied themelves up a bit. Great job!
Love & Light
Debbera
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Powerfully penned. You have expressed a personal, deep sense of yourself that few would have the courage to pen but you have, and for that, Thank You
Amazing poem Truly
Best of Luck in contests
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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What a wonderfully touching poem. This is so vivid with great imagery & choice of words.I love the way you describe yourself in comparison to Him.
felt like a dirty cup with molding liquid sloshing around inside
the sticky smell stuck into the crevices at the bottom.
your hands smelled of fresh pine
they felt cool to the touch as they encircled my face and my heart and my soul
I love this. Marv. Trust you'll do well in the Contest!
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but instead all I know is that this sunshine that you beam on my face
is your gentle way of saying that you are watching me
What a beautiful poem of remembrance for the forgiving God, always there to take us closer to His heart. This is a wonderful poem of inspiration.
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i associate sunshine with God too
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all of these are so beautiful!what a heartfelt piece!!
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i guess it's comorting to know when he touches us..i personally am still waiting for mine
mal
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