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liars

I let you into my life
thinking everything would be just fine.
My friends all liked you,
now your friends to!

You told me you felt sorry,
that I had a broken knee cap
and looked all lonely.
We talked and it led onto something new,
I even left my girlfriend for you!

Now that I'm not injuried
you really don't give a damn.
your lying to everyone even me and my girlfriend.

Please get away from me,
your filling my girlfriend with horrid thoughts,
that i'm lying to her,
and i'm really not!

You have messed up my love life,
which I hope i can fix!
you Lied to my bestfriend!
you little witch!!!

I didn't need sympathy,

even if I was in pain,

I wish I never met you

Now my tears are like rain!

Author notes

MY EX-GIRLFRIEND DID THIS TO ME (yes im a girl) this just happened today and my anger brought me this poem

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • xXemo-teddybearXx
    March 7

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    whoa

    this was amazing
    i felt your anger
    this was just amazing
    great job
    thankyou for entering my contest
    goodluck
    xXalyXx
    his emo teddybear


  • couldbeworse
    February 20

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    dang women lol. well, you penned something great out of heartache so at least you got something out of it. keep your muse flowing and keep penning.


  • Cyanide Dreams
    February 15

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    This is a very good write. The flow was really good and so was the rhyme. The emotion was strong and I felt the mad sad and mena in it. Good job and thanks for entering my contest.

    Josh


  • untouched pages
    February 10
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    Girl... thats why I stick with guys.. women are just to b-itchy for me... lol I'm sorry hun, I hope that this write was a great outlet for you. If your gf now really cares about you she will know that this other chick is just being a bag..... I hope you can smile soon!!


  • Spiritual Soul
    February 9

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    An angry piece but I like it. So sorry things aren't going well for you and someone has messed up your relationship, that's no fun Great write though good luck in the contests!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~


  • once
    February 9

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    angry and fantastic.

    while it is lacking the 'deep' i seek, this conveys an emotional deep that is in a class of its own. the language is shaky but the raw feeling strings together the halting phrases. i hope with all my heart you can make things better. thank you.

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