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Self Realization

Waking in darkness,
swathed in rotting cloth,
stumbling from my coffin
seeking light like a moth.

Oh God! I’m Goth!


Author notes

Okay - so I'm a bit twisted
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: http://redsigns.deviantart.com/art/The-Sacred-Cat-109025820
20 words

A contest entry

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  • Mozarts funeral gold member
    February 20
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    lolol i love it! :-) you're very clever.


    • KayJay
      February 20
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      Flattery will get you everywhere (LOL) You know that the way to a man's heart is through his ego Thank you for the kind comments and for sharing a laugh with me... Lord knows, we need them more nowadays than ever before...
      Take care...
      Ken


  • Jesann gold member
    February 10
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    Ha ha...twisted for sure ha ha !!!!
    So very clever, very well done.
    Congrats on the HM.


    • KayJay
      February 10
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      I was feeling fiesty and silly... it just happened Glad you got a chuckle.

      Ken


  • funpum
    February 10
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    wonderful

    Great - just my sense of humour. i shall have to read more of yours now...

    • KayJay
      February 10
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      Why thank you! I do love humor and while I've written a ton in the last year, not much call for humor... Still, I would recommend http://allpoetry.com/poem/4297689 which I personally think is hilarious... let's see how close our senses of humor are
      Ken


  • Meroza
    February 10

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    The start was capturing me, so well written, and the ending made me fall off my chair, a perfect ending!

    Take care


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    February 9

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    Haha. How utterly ingenious of you! I sure hope you don't think of me that way Lol, best of luck & all that


  • JinSays gold member
    February 9

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    I LOVE IT.
    Fantastic twist, my kind of humor.
    Says alot in few words.
    Wonderful Ken.
    Love,
    jin


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    February 9

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    I loved this. Great take on the prompt. I love the wry humor in this one. Best of luck in the contest.

    Mike


  • charcoal
    February 9
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    twisted for sure. you had fun mister (:


  • Rose Dark Thorn silver member
    February 9

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    This made me want to giggle. I was totally not expecting the little twist at the end, but it was fairly amusing.

    Well done on the prompt you chose.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    February 9

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    just a bit hmm?? lol I found your take on the prompt to be quite different and funny... definitely not what I expected, which is a good thing.

    good luck
    kat


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    February 9

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    wow...yes i agree, we have the similar view on the prompt. wonderful take! good luck in the contest.


  • Kathraina silver member
    February 9

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    AHAHAHA
    Looooove this! Great job
    Best of luck in the contest!

    ♥ Kathraina


  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 9

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    haha, i laughed at the end, you are funny, haha, meanie jk, this is pretty spiffy, good luck and take care
    Stephanie ♥

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