Worries, fears-
Anchor me
To rough ground.
Facade-
Artifical grin,
Then it seems
I could float
If I weren't so
Weighed down.
Reaching,
Attempt severing cords
Tying me to present reality.
Dangling between
Freedom and self-pity...
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Written on February 9th, 2009.
-Sadien-
Author notes
Photo prompt: http://www2.oakland.edu/shatteringearth/files/ParkeHarrison_Tethered_fs.jpg
Phrase prompt: "Anchored to the ground when trying to be set free"
Written and posted on February 9th, 2009.
I've felt like this for weeks. I just didn't quite know how to get it out. It seems that I am so close to the salvation I crave, yet there's always something holding me back.
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shivers my friend
Dangling between
Freedom and self-pity...
WHERE WE ALL HANG MY FRIEND
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Thank you!
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Very nice. Now this poem spoke volumes to me. I give you 30 points for this poem. You had a total of 61 points plus this poem gives you 91 out of 100. Excellent job. I am adding this poem to the finalist list. Excellent work. Thanks for entering and the best of luck to you. Kahy
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Ver awesome write. And well written! Good luck!
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Facade-
Artifical grin,
Then it seems
I could float
If I weren't so
Weighed down.
congrats on the gold. well deserved! -
Fantastic piece representing a struggle many people will be able to relate to. You penned it well! Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck. It’s an honor to have you show your work here!
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You did a great job relating to the picture prompt. Your message about the struggle in your spiritual battle is one that so many will be able to relate to. You did a very nice job putting some very complicated feelings onto paper. Thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty
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this is a very good write filled with a helpless pain i felt
,you shall never find true salvation within yourself until you can get rid your emotions and find the true peace that lyes in there waiting for you, because emotions are what holds us back, because even though there are the positives... happiness and love and what not, the negatives will always have their chance and find their way in,
keep learning and living and you shall find what you are looking for
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You expressed that so well...the spiritual battle... and you know, what we all fall short...but keep trying you will win, I see it in your words, self expression is soothing to the soul. Blessings.
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Thank you
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Girl.. im right there with you... this is a powerful write... I found my self matching the feelings and emotions with ones of my very own!! sigh im there too girl!!
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Yeah, it kind of sucks lately. I have an oppurtunity to follow one of my biggest dreams, but I'd have to move states away to do it, and leave my boyfriend and friends behind... and I don't want to do that at all. But at the same time, I'm a bit mad at myself that I'm turning it down, even though in the end I know it's for the best.
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Wonderful piece.
I can feel the emotion in your words.
I'm so sorry you've felt this way, I hope things will get better for you. Just have to hang on ^.^
Thank you for entering and good luck
♥ Kathraina
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Thanks.
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