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Cherry Cola

As always she drifts into the centre
Cherry gold sunlight filters through her hair
Dust particles dancing on her nose
She ponders, just for a moment
The questions of life
Those her's are much simpler
Only two available answers
Will she live, or will she die?

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  • lindaburns gold member
    February 15

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    Is there any chance that the first word in the 6th line should be "Though"? What I see here is a small part of a large picture. Like a corner of "The Tomb Raider" poster. Life? Death? Daily questions. Let's do it anyway. Good write.


  • charcoal
    February 9

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    Cherry gold sunlight filters through her hair
    Dust particles dancing on her nose


    my favorite lines (: