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My first Love!

a new boy at school
he pulled my heart
he just too cool
for us to be apart

he's not like the others
he makes people laugh
a giggle after another
we followed the same path

he was so fun
he made my life complete
he's never stop talking on and on
i felt my heart beat

i liked him lots
but didn't know he liked me
but he ended up asking me out
and then my spirit fell free

after school that day
so happy as can be
jumping around the house
realizing i love me

it made my life a difference
it made a smile appear on me
he was my prince
and i was princess to be

i remember in the playground
me and him and my friend and hers
we used to play games mostly dares
we used to have fun enjoy our lifes

and i was so happy i was alive

i remember the hugs
i didn't want to let go
why do people take drugs
when love can grow

i was really in love
i knew how it felt
there was doves
in my belly stuck in my belt

but then every hug felt sad
and he had to leave i was mad
and go to another country
i was upset but acted glad

i still talk to him on emails
but miss him too much to describe
my heart is not as big as a whale
but i still got memories in my heart nailed.

To Lloyd

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i love Lloyd

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  • Bruce silver member
    February 9, 2009
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    Very sweet Lana! I did notice a typo: first stanza, third line - I think He should be He's.


  • FreakofNight
    February 9, 2009
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    Very nice, good write.


  • Rhapsody
    February 9, 2009
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    in love at 11.... hmm...