Peaches...
They smell so good
As they sway in the breeze
Loving the taste
Allowing the fresh juice to flow
On my waiting lips
As I slowly lick
The peach nectar
Away
Author notes
Pic found at www.google.com
A contest entry
- Pre-writes, with conditions by WarrioroftheHeart.
550 points, ended March 18, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love peaches, very sweet and tart. good for cobbler. good job.
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This does have a sensuality to it. This is also the first that has been entered in my contest for being too short.
It is short, it is also to the point and very descriptive. You packed a lot of punch in a few words and presented a clear and complete image with your write.
Well done, thank you for entering it in my contest. I wish you the best of luck in all things.
Adrian.
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This was in Beautiful Tragedy Contest
I removed it when I saw thistoo short...
sorry.
disqualified.
Would not go on my author's notes so posted it here.......
Susan~~~ -
Ah, the words
so fresh on the page
as the peach on the vine,
as heady as wine.
Smacking good!!!
M-C
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I think you did a great job with that picture. It was making me hungry. I think I may have to go to the store to get some peaches. Sorry if you have been ill. Take care.
Your sis
love brenda -
Succulent!!
Hey Sis! Your poem is 'just peachy'! I really enjoyed it!
I still have a cold which is draining me and making me feel lethargic. Best thing to do is to lie down and take a nap (so that's what I'm going to do).
Love you, Sis!
Maureen 
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Beautiful~
Oh My this makes me hungry
I have not had a peach in ions and the last one I had was juicy to the point I could swim in its nectar
Excellent this is Sis~ Love it!!
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Dear Molly,
That picture is really a doozie,
for the peaches look so ripe and juicy.
When I squeeze one or two,
they remind me of you
'coz they're soft tho' incredibly bruisey.
If I handle their skin, not too tight
I'm quite sure that their flavour's just right.
If I ask for a taste
Would you say I'm disgraced
for wanting a moderate bite?
If I stroke them with gentle caress,
will you think of me any the less?
When I squeeze two or three
will they drop from the tree
or burst through their skins if i press?
AWWW! I just LOVE that picture and can just TASTE
the juiciness. And I'm so glad this isn't a contest poem, although I'm waiting for yours in our No.#41.
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Da.
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too short...
sorry.
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yum yum
Great poem Sis!
I enjoy the images created by your words here, and if I may say.....it is quite sensual too.
Good luck in the contest!
Jeannette
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I actually dreamed about peaches last night after reading this poem.The power of suggestion and this juicy poem really did me in. Lol.
~Amanda~
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This poem is delicious. It makes me want a peach so bad. Peaches are one of my favorite flavors and smells. You wouldn't believe how many peach scented beauty products and candles I own. Man I wish I could get to the store now and buy some. Well done.
~Amanda~
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could be a comercial sis,lol nice poem for such a lucious fruit, good luck in the contest
moon
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mmm yum I can almost taste your poem lol a wonderful poem good luck in the contestmaralisa
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ohh fun and yummy, i love peaches.. my grandmother used to make peach jam from the peaches on her tree..
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Excellent
What a great creation. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest
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Love the write. If had a sensual feel to it. You did a wonderful job on this one sis.
Best of luck in the contest.
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very well worded, creates such a longing to have some..... mmmm peaches and cream lol
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Made me wanna peach so bad!
WOW, that is a yummy poem you wrote. 
Oh my gosh...
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Very tasty
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Dang sis, now I'm hungry for a fresh peach, with two feet of snow on the ground.
Very Good Sis....Best wishes in the contest
Big Bro
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Mmm delicious piece!
Leaves me yearning for a peach!
Awesome job and good luck to you!
♥ Kathraina
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This is a beautiful image and makes me hungry sis. I enjoyed reading this. You have amazing imagery in these few words. Good luck in the contest.
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