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floor of stars

You make casual footsteps
on a floor of stars, an augury
the rhythm of a deep black drum
calls from patient memory

the dust that rises
inflects the air with movement
and bodies bend and sway
like palms on the shore, so fluent

a deeper beat follows now
strings sound return desire
hands circle close
bodies step, spin in fires

the spirits that watch us
kiss our eyes before sleep,
carry us in laughter
and hold us when we weep

now glow within, as with their joy we flow
entwine our spirits in ancient echoes.


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  • nichtmich silver member
    February 15

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    The title pulled me in, very intriguing! The soft imagery is the joy of life itself. The first stanza is my favorite, all are good!


  • MxH
    February 15
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    wow, this flowed very well. Fascinating, almost eerily calm content. nicely done.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    February 10

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    There is such an EASE to this piece, both in the tone and in actions. I guess it all is just the playing out of that first wonderful stanza...to walk CASUALLY upon the stars...I mean, there is definitely an ease of demeanor, a surety, a confidence in that...as if in this case such an act requires no certain boldness or strength, but rather is a natural outworking of this star-walker's character, this one who is so in tune with the deep black drum. It is no wonder that such marvelous things follow such stepping. The two become so in tune with one another. Such intimacy. And they seem so in tune with the ethereal as well. The ancient echoes of what was patiently remembered has come full circle. It's really something marvelous to read and experience.


  • Andrew Norris
    February 10

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    This is a poem one must read slowly. You have such a nice choice of words it is a pity to hurry. The atmosphere is very appealing, lulling one into a sense of calmness, just what I needed at this moment.

  • tara wilson gold member
    February 10

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    i feel such a mingling of beautiful spirits in this poem, takes me to a place of positivity, like being influenced by brilliant people from the past.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    February 9

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    Your poem has a very soothing feeling. The mystical tone makes it even more enjoyable.
    Very pleasant read Howard

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