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Take Cover We've Got Incoming!

Dodging bullets like molten raindrops

On cracked and broken battlefields

Friend and foe will dine in blood

Together they smile and hope the rest will break free

 

My Enfield L85A2 is heavy in my hand

Aim, shoot, kill again; just another day's work

Enemies staring back at me with hollow eyes

Murder made justified for some soil and a fucking clap

Why not shake hands? why not live in peace?

Millions wasted for the greed of a single man

 

Deranged shrieks of pain and anguished pleas for mercy

Is all a hear in every waking moment and every dream

The sergeant acquaints us with speeches of motivation

Propaganda rolling off his tongue with a venomous smile

Soldiers nod but i take his words and crush them

 

Crouched in a speeding jeep

Time bombs watch like death clocks

Shrapnel rips through fragile flesh, flesh of the innocent

Finally I dine in blood with my foe

Together we smile and hope the rest will break free

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Basically this is a concept poem about war.....i reckon that would be obvious enough. But i thought i might aswell tell you. It's about a soldier who has realised that war is so currupt and pointless and grows a great distaste for his sergeant and every little aspect of war. Even those miles and miles away AKA the politicians responible for his and every other soldiers suffering. Eventually he dies after hitting a road mine and get's to do what he wanted to all along, have a good time with the people he was fighting, show them he never wanted to hurt them and hope that other people will realise that war is evil and either escape from it or stop it.
P.S an Enfield L85A2 is a modern assault rifle used by the british army

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  • Vertigo-
    March 8
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    wow...


  • hks
    February 28
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    powerful
    :]


  • Kathraina silver member
    February 14
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    Great piece.
    Fantastic imagery and great flow to it!

    ♥ Kathraina


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    February 11

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    Wow, this is different from what I am use to reading. Thanks for the explaination in AN. Very touching piece, powerful.


  • Nobody Important
    February 10

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    Needs a few more techiques, but it is FUCKING AWESOME!
    Fav line:"Propaganda rolling off his tongue with a venomous smile" very descriptive and venomous itself Puts a clear image in my head.

    I dig the repetition of the first line:
    Together they smile and hope the rest will break free
    but i cannot figure it out :S

    LEDGE.

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