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The Bride of Perdition

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The Bride of Perdition

I am the bride of perdition
Lascivious pride of the master
A wife that is held in submission
A life condemned to disaster

I have cried in my state of doom
I am the bride of perdition
Like a flower in constant bloom
Devouring recognition

I am a soul in remission
For he took control of my heart
I am the bride of perdition
I have tried and cannot depart

For Dracula is my Sire
The fistula of sedition
Abiding by his desire
I am the bride of perdition

 

 

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Author notes

Published: 2/09/09

Quatern with internal rhyme. 

Picture is of Sophia Myles from the TV movie, Bram Stoker's Dracula.

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  • poisonivystar4
    November 16

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    Well done! Good luck in the contest!


  • guardianhost gold member
    May 20
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    I love the ending ...well done - all the best in the contest

  • Eusebius
    March 4

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    A most spooky and extremely well done and twice potent poem! Excellent in every regard, I absolutely loved it!

  • Frodofan
    March 1

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    I think this is very well written and captures the character perfectly. "The bride of perdition" is such a simple but perfect description. Definently an original vampire poem.

    Thanks for entering.

  • Purrsanthema
    February 24

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    I love this, and the surprise last stanza. Again, I love the counterpoint of how you use the internal rhyme: by making them in couplets while the whole stanza is an abab quatrain gives it a powerful internal cohesion and a great musicality. I love the choice of the word fistula.


  • Dark Otter
    February 21

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    Stopped by

    and thought to see what is this woman doing now. I see that you have used a difficult form to nail a dark write. I hate to see you competing in my arena. Today, I bow to your skill and acknowledge the mastery of your work. Well done, poetess!


  • Paloszoo gold member
    February 17

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    I love your dark writes. Great use of this awesome form. You have such a talent for using the most perfect words. BRAVO! Thanks for entering my contest. Good luck. It’s an honor to have you show your work here!


  • Rovingone gold member
    February 15

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    Excellent rhyme, beautiful flow and it just catches the look of the lady in the picture. Even though I've never seen the movie and am not a big fan of vampire flicks and the like, you made a perfect message of it all. And, I like the way you wrote the poem too. A Quatern is a clever manner of rhyme.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 12

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    Awesome!! I love when you pen on the dark side of fantasy! No one can capture like you. Love it Sis!


  • Desire gold member
    February 11
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    Wow~

    Oh My Beautiful this is Excellent ~ I was holding on to every word~Oy!!!
    Fine form as always and I savor the words weaved What a tale told~ Loved it!!
    You Go On Girly!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Voice~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Tirrell
    February 11

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    Lovely quartern with the gothic feel, love this one.
    Very nicely composed my friend, as I find this enchanting, love the internal rhyme...


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    February 9

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    Great poem, Amera
    It's intricacy is hidden by the poems compelling images
    Dark but not too dark
    a wonderful piece of work!

    love
    D


  • doolie gold member
    February 9

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    Such an awesome write. You are the queen of poetry. Thank you for a fantastic read.
    Best of luck in the contest.


  • melphleg gold member
    February 9

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    Once again impressive. Good use of vocabulary, repetition and internal rhyme.
    I know it's meant to be dark, but to me it reads sad because I think some woman actually feel this way about their husbands and marriage and they are not married to Dracula


  • Swangrnv gold member
    February 9

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    oh yeah..

    nothing like a good vampire story to get the blood
    flowing!! you are also an amazingly skilled writer..but i bet you knew that!!


  • Melodies
    February 9

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    Well said and beautifully penned, good and fine poet. A wonderful trip into the land of fantasy, indeed!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    February 9

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    well penned poetesse.
    This poem kicks *ss!

    Keep up the great work, but then again, you always do.

    Love
    Passions

  • Papagallo
    February 9

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    I really like the dark side of your work. There is such beauty and mystery here. May you do well in the contest; Papagallo


  • Dalaney gold member
    February 9

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    The title is fabulous!  The poem - exquisite as always.  Your mind must be a bottomless well of creativity.  Sigh.  Love, Lane


  • Denerica silver member
    February 9

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    As always your write gave an image, the flow and techniques you masterfully craft so well. Blessings.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 9

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    Niiiice! Brings back memories of the old Hammer horror flicks and such.

    You are one of my poetic heroines Amera.

    Blessings and love,
    mj.


  • Faeryn
    February 9

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    Awesome!! Wonderfully dark and I love the repetition. The wording you used is spectacular. I love it! The picture is great too.
    Love,
    Tay


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 9

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    Good use of the form, repetition suits these dark themes, you have been having fun with internal rhyme and vocabulary too I love fistula of sedition!

    Great stuff

    Jeff

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