My heart remains before the sea,
Surrounded by eternal whispers of the gentle melody,
Vexed by the lavish streams of glee,
Never to be taken by the sway of melancholy ...
What perfection you hold my northern star,
A joy of verses so deeply held upon my soul,
Sweet dreams of you bind and mend the scar,
That once swallowed my happiness whole.
Stay ... with me ... for eternity ...
Succoring me in this ethereal world.
You were the one that saved me (love is all that matters),
Midst the tumultuous storm, you showed me clemency.
Upon my copious dreams of thee,
My lustrous nascent fantasy,
No force could frighten my ardor ...
Now place the key before the door.
Trance-like, outspread was my heart,
Stirring midst the earnest stars from the start,
Where wandering sounds breathe our name,
As immortality holds our flame.
'O brightest angel,
You rose upon the wind and tide,
To seize my soul where I confide,
All that stayed silently confine,
Dazzling upon the vermilion vine ...'
Stay ... with me ... for eternity ...
Harmoniously descending to our world,
Sprinkled with silent tears of wonderment,
Completely woven by morning dews of yesterday that went ...
To entice the pleasantries of love in unison to glow,
In this waterfall of golden streams where the others swim below,
You were always my jeweled pearl in the sea of gold,
You are my world in high fervor never again left in the cold ...
Author notes
Too many emotions stayed within me for a long time ... I allowed it to build and this is what was spat ... the contest itself helped big time and that picture is quite well taken ... hope you enjoyed ...
G.
A contest entry
- LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE by Swan song.
900 points, ended February 22, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest and truthful ....
Comments
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spun with true talent!!!! i enjoyed so much
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I am blown away!
I loved this so much! as you wrote I read and i took it to be very spiritual, which touch my heart so much! i am blessed and only God can give us His very best and He does,
Blessings
Rend
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You had a typo o.o
"Where wandering sounds breath our name,"
'tis "breathe"
Other than that my friend I have not much to say, I enjoyed the read and it was a lovely little flow of love indeed -- almost tender, but more a simple manner you have avowed your love I think -- overall well done as always my friend. I especially like this phrase "you showed me clemency" -- Indeed (for me at least) amongst the greater imports in love.
Ta-Ta Darkling,
Emonquente
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It is amazing ... my friend, thank you for catching that for me! Your comments are always appreciated ... I will indeed try and talk with you sometime soon, I must apologize for not getting back with you my friend ...
Thanks again, and it's fixed hehe
G.
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Loved it. The imagery, the word choice and emotion is brilliant. You seemed to have changed rhyme scheme after a couple stanzas but loved the poem.
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Why thank you for gracing me with another comment my friend ... yes, I tend to change rhyme schemes ... I sometimes feel like an entire poem with the same rhyme scheme can be sometimes forced and like to change it up ... I know I shouldn't, and it's kind of taxing to more fluent poets out there, but I can't help it .... heh ... thank you again my friend.
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This piece is so amazing... i particularly like the second stanza...
"What perfection you hold my northern star,
A joy of verses so deeply held upon my soul,
Sweet dreams of you bind and mend the scar,
That once swallowed my happiness whole."
This touched me as it should any reader.... It conveys such a healing emotion/effect.. the imagery is fantastic...
Two more lines that drew my attention were..
"You rose upon the wind and tide,
To seize my soul where I confide,.."
Thats a vast range... as they say, love transcends all...and this is evident in these pure words...
i loved this as I love all of your pieces... deep emotion is unveiled...
brilliant..!
huggs
becca
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