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watching from afar

Missing image
Hiding my thoughts behind
this daisy I hold in front of me
I gaze on at you from a distance.

The wind whips my hair about
making it dance upon my skin,
but I am lost in thoughts of love.

You left me with no warning
and it has been years since
I'd seen you last.

Now I'm here just a breath away
but I cannot get my feet to
take the path to your arms.

I'll never know why we didn't last
or why we hide from each other now
but at least I know I loved you once
and still enough to not ruin
what had been.

Author notes

Credit the picture: http://thetragictruth-of-me.deviantart.com/art/A-Distant-Figure-42014576

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  • Hope Angel silver member
    March 16

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    Wow this is so powerful and beautiful. I enjoyed reading this a lot. Thank you for entering


  • jayyniecakes.
    February 16
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    aww... sadd sadd.

    ;[

    best of luck in my contest.


  • Temptation.
    February 12
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    this flows amazingly! and i like the imagery too. thanks for entering and good luck.


  • daviscth silver member
    February 9

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    Your words overflow with amazing imagery as well as emotion. You really created a great poem. Thanks for sharing.


  • Emerald-Eyes
    February 9

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    This is really beautiful, great imagery and great emotion which is obvious in every line.
    Well done and good luck
    xx


  • Rhythm Child
    February 9

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    Hiding my thoughts behind
    this daisy I hold in front of me

    i loved the reference to the picture.


    I'll never know why we didn't last
    or why we hide from each other now
    but at least I know I loved you once
    and still enough not ruin
    what had been.


    Now the lines above really struck a cord with me because ive been having some difficulties of late and hopefully it will never come to the worst but if it eveer does im sure i can find comfort in what you have written here

  • Rhythm Child
    February 9
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