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Please let me die

I run to my room and lock the door.
I just can't take the pain anymore.

I take a piece of glass and cut my wrist.
Who cares anymore? I won't be missed.

The pain in my wrist takes the pain from my heart.
Why did my life have to fall apart?

Why couldn't he love me for who I really am?
He treated me like shit. He didn't give a damn.

Theres pounding at my door. Please go away.
I don't want to live anymore. I don't want to stay.

They break down my door and rush into the room.
All I hear is " it's okay. It'll be over soon."

I scream at them, " leave me alone."
It's like they can't hear me. Mom picks up the phone.

She dials 9-1-1 and then starts to cry.
" Please help me. Don't let my daughter die."

I wake up in a hospital room.
I look at the clock. it's almost noon.

I look at my bandaged wrist and start to cry.
Why did they have to help? Why couldn't they let me die?

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a poem about self harm

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  • Miss Macabre
    August 26

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    This is depressing, not a good situation to be in, and I hope it isn't written from personal experience. Some suggestions:

    [The pain in my wrist takes the pain from my heart.]

    I would replace wrist with something else, you used it recently and repetition can disrupt flow.

    This is a good write, could be polished, but thanks for entering and good luck.


  • darkangel-darksoul
    June 19

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    very well written poem... i love the raw emotion to it... and great rhyme..., good job... thanks for your entry


  • innocence jaded.xx
    June 9
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    Prose/freeverse only...sorry =/

    Thank you for letting me read this anyway. (:
    ♥


  • Enrinye
    June 8

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    a nice write, loved the flowing and images - I felt like being there myself...unfortunately,I can feel that there is no depth behind your words but keep up the good work...

    take care


  • fairytalelovestory
    June 6
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    oh wow. what a heartbreaking poem


  • liquidmindforever gold member
    May 16

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    Poignant

    Dear Poet

    Thank you for entering my contest: PREWRITES
    FOR BRONZE & SILVER TROPHY WINNERS, ONLY
    with yur submission PLEASE let me die

    best wished in the contest
    till then
    stay
    liquid

    finalist


  • emoempess
    May 8

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    this is a very sad moment...
    i felt strong thati cant even express..
    i had this expirience before...


  • Freiheit89
    April 29
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    555-5556
    call me....


  • insanely-crazy
    March 8

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    Yes you would be missed. My best friend is like you. She moved... But she didnt end up in the hospital. This Poem did make me cry. Good job though


  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    March 6

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    the desperation in this poem is amazing. i like it alot. it sublty pf the rhymes was also very nice. thank you for entering and good luck


  • babiix3333
    February 22
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    this is a great poem OMG!
    i know you wrote it out of imagination, thats how i wrte, prettymuch all of mine that have to do eith suicide and cutting. i used to cut, but stopped myself. your poem really made sence. :]
    we have almost the same writing style, if you ever wannna talk about stuff, im here :] write back!


    • Shelby K
      February 25
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      thanks for your comment. i think about hings like that a lot. ive gone through life being hated for who i am and no matter what i do the teasing, the laughing, an the meaness never stops. im 17 and have been dealing with it since i was 5. i just feel like lifes not worth it. luckilly i can write poetry to vent some of my sadness because if i didnt i would probally have killed myself a long time ago.


  • still.she.waits
    February 21
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    i really dont mean to belittle the situation, if you have gone through it, but i think that this topic is over don and badly done, and this is no exception. everything about this screams cliche! and i dont know know what would make this better. its like a diary entry..


    • Shelby K
      February 25
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      its ok. it was just my imagination anyway. it never really happened.

  • emo kid 666
    February 12

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    dude, That reaches me. Your like totally deep within your poems. Keep rockin, Message me sometime, Cod


    • Shelby K
      February 18
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      thanks. im glad you liked my poem. it wasnt something that really happened though. i just made it up.


  • blindprophet11
    February 9

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    thats intense i remeber having them days but now im past that im glad i didnt die you did a good job writting this it has a good flow to it props from me


  • beautiful.obsession
    February 8

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    wow. this is amazing! i loved it. it flowed very well. and you had good ryhmes. great job. i can really relate to this. i hope things get better for you. if not im here to talk

  • starving-to-survive
    February 8

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    OMG i cant stop crying, i can relate to this so so well...i have been in the same position as you many times before, i know how you feel. Your words have really hit me hard. Please talk to me, i really think that we could help eachother cos we both feel the same. I am so sorry.
    And for the record i am so glad that your parents cared enough to save you, as much as you didnt want it, im sure one day you will be greatful that they didnt let you die.
    I think my favourite line in this has to be 'The pain in my wrist takes the pain from my heart.' Such powerful and emotional words, and so true.
    Thank you for entering my contest, i am honoured, and please, if you ever need to talk i am here for you

    • Shelby K
      February 18
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      thanks for the message but i hought you should know that the poem wasnt real. it was just my imagination running wild. ive thought about doing what i did in the poem many times but ive never followed through with it. ive realised that its not worth it. i have so many people in my life that do love me and so many things i want to do with my life. im glad you liked the poem though. i think its one of the best i have written so far.

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