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Not quite fishing line (but you're reeling me in anyway)

I don’t think it was coincidence
The day we first met.
I felt a connection
Almost like we were meant to be together
But at 14, I couldn’t understand why.

Little did I know
But the moment I turned around
In my chair to say hello,
Before the first word even came out
God took a piece of string
And tied it around our hearts.

Lives changed
Forever connecting two people

And now, years later
I feel the pull of it
The knot still tight as the first day it was tied

Some days the slack hangs plenty
And I move about freely
Not worrying about the ten hours between us
Or the fact that you train for war

But on other days
Or nights like these
I feel it
Taut
A constant tug
A reminder of all the space
In between us
And all the days
Before you’re in my arms again

I don’t want to pull
Knowing your heart feels it too
And I would only cause more pain
So I lay very still
And think of you in dreams
Until the string releases me
To survive another day without you

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  • csmmoms2
    August 7
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    Try 43 years...the fishing line becomes little steel chain links that can't be broken. Well done dear poet. -c


  • Aberrant Monk
    February 8
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    I like!!