cream paper
caresses curving frame
reflecting light
reflecting rain
I hold you
Ivory silk
bound with cherry braids
well-chosen words
supple secrets revealed
fabric pools
Touches scatter
blossoms in the breeze
hair fans on pillow
ebony laced with amber
shared dreams
Author notes
Picture Inspiration: http://www.asiaarts.ucla.edu/media/images/memoirs%203.jpg
I realize that tanka and haiku are defined with syllable counts, but after writing haiku IN Japanese, I have found that 5 and 7 syllables is far too much to capture the spirit of the form.... so i got rid of it 
The girl this is written about is Chinese. I hope she is not offended 
May post Japanese version later--that's always fun.
In a list
A contest entry
- You choose the picture contest. by Black Narcissus.
16000 points, ended February 12, 2009, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thoughts?
Comments
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A beautifully soft verse for a lovely picture. You described it perfectly and I'm sure the girl would not be in the slightest bit offended.
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although i have to say... it does roll of the tounge very well...
good choice of words!
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i feel like i need to read more than the picture...
i would write something based off of the picture, not a description of the pic..
but thats just me.
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