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A world through a stranger’s eyes

How lucky are we to live a life my sweet
But life is not all it is cracked up to be
You know that to

My life is plain and simple
Your life is full of excitement
The sudden rush makes you bleed
From your whole body in pain

Life is not all it appears to be through the naked eye

Please love enjoy you life
As much as you can while your hold is in tack

Tell me lover who is to judge
You in such a harsh manner

Telling the world your story
Has made a hole in my heart

It is not easy seeing my lover’s life
Wasting away right in front of my eyes

I know how you feel
How can I just sit there and watch you suffer
While I just sit there and wait patiently as I can
For you to explode

I remember you are all ways telling me
You felt like your life is like a bomb
That’s right a bomb going off in your body
And I can’t stop the explosion
No matter how hard we try to fix your body

Countless tests every day
Bring you in even more doubt
That this is the way that
Hell is meant to be

I know you want to die so badly
But I won’t let you suffer any more, my sweet

It is strange to lose the one we love the most
Yet our hearts echo in none existing beat

You feel like I am the liar
Staring right through your soul

I admit to the world
I am a liar
I am not afraid to speak the naked truth on behalf of my lover
I say the case is odd

We had to send her away
Nothing can touch what my lover
Has to do or say
Her body is in no condition to live on

Watching the helper go through the steps
Was the worst
Seeing her life flashing before my eyes

Watching you drink that tiny drop
A tiny sip is all it is

I can’t believe such a tiny drop can
Be the difference between life and death
Heaven and hell

Forgive me for not saying good bye
Like I meant to do

I know world you would like me to say these
Words
But I knew it was the best for her in the end
Her decision effected so many hearts to break
But world my broken heart is the only heart to stand
By her side all the way

None of us wanting her life to end this way
But none of us wanted to die like a puppet on a string

My last words as I passed on to my lover
Was ‘ditto’
Her favourite word that put a smile on her face

World I felt her pain

Her fragile heart stop beating
As I cradle her in my arms
Like a new-born baby

If you really care for my lover
You would be right by her side like
I was



A shame she could not die
In the country were she was born and bred in
World you should be ashamed of your selves 

Not everyone is as brave and strong
As my lover is

I do your wishing I live my life
In happiness
Move on, met new people, get out there

But I will never forget you my love
Until our hearts beat in sync

I am going to say it for the first time
I love you. I still love you. I wish I could wish I could have said these
Words when you were alive

But my heart was too late

Good bye my lover

You have shown the true meaning of life to the world.

Author notes

this poem means a lot to be. Ever since I watch that movie short stay in Switzerland I feel like a part of life is missing in others lives.

People get so sick sometimes they are fed up of not beginning apart of life and want to kill their selves. But this is not suicide in any way. This is euthanasia and it is very important that people recognises the difference between the two.

suicide= bad death
euthanasia= good death

I wanted to show this poem on-line first just in-case people might get odd ideas about me at school.

so what do you guy think?

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Comments

  • Thankyou for entering in LoveNeverDies,

    It was a little long for my liking,
    but after reading it,
    It really touched alot of areas.

    I thank you again for your poem and wish you alll the luck

    (:

  • Mizu Shoujo
    February 13
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    This poem was very emotional.... yes touching... i liked it a lot.


  • Kp.s
    February 11
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    Overall, the subject of your poem was touching and heartfelt, and also a very interesting take on the matter.

    Try reading your poem out loud. You have several spelling errors and other grammatical problems, but nothing a little time won't fix.

    I really enjoyed your 'bomb' metaphor, it was interesting. I thought perhaps your ending could be simply the second last stanza, because 'goodbye my lover' makes me think of James Blunt, and it doesn't fit with the originality of your piece.

    Very good job!
    Thank for entering and all the best,
    (don't forget to read aloud, it helps!)
    KP

  • goldenlocks
    February 8

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    I like the theme and the write to a point...

    You have some errors..."her decision has effect so many"
    you also change tenses...

    Her decision has effect so many hearts to break
    But world my broken heart is the only heart to stand
    By her side all the way

    were she was born and breed in...I think you want "bred"

    I'll be back and check again!
    Thanks
    Good luck!