I am lost in life
to the point of being mute -
blue as an ice-floe
In a list
A contest entry
- Finish the Haiku by duana.
1200 points, ended February 8, 23 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hoodwinked!
You have shown the way that we can not only personify a season but relate to it, perfectly.
Congrats on the trophy.
Sorry that I am late with the hoodwink!
Shari
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M airi...Nice haiku
haiku eulogy
say i loved to laugh
say it again and again
then that's it...i died
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I get lots of comments about this one, and I only wrote the last line!
I have just had a handful of my haiku published recently, by the way.
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This was brilliant, and I agree with you that the best written haiku's are in real life aha moments! I LOVED this and can't believe I never thought to write a haiku around the picture I chose to use to represent me. Very nicely done- love the adjective blue and how it ties in the subject of the 2 lines with the third perfectly!
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It begged to be done!
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stilling, thats how this makes me feel. this is a beautiful haiku, i love the last two lines
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... only one of which is mine.
Thank you.
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Congrats on your 5/17ths!
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5/17th of a thank-you.
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It just came to you eh, like and eagle snatching a salmon from a stream?
Lovely dear, and at this time of year, where I live, I see a lot of blue ice flows in the ocean inlet.
You are a true poetic inspiration.
mj.
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More like an osprey snatching a pike from a loch, but yes.
Thank you.
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For the sheer effort of finding a proper allusion to nature I commend you -- and well befitting the prior lines to boot, well done.
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It just came to me - as all good haiku should.
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Oh, my, how perfectly lovely. Amazing how you can tell a full story in so few words. Good luck in the contest.
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(silly me - I followed the link!)
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I love this sis! You have composed a fantastic metaphor by starting the poem with a senryu and finishing it as a haiku. I smile as I never thought I would see you follow the 17 syllable rule.
Love,
Amera♥
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I'm chuckling, because I only wrote five seventeenths of this poem!
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LOL, didn't read the contest! So you worked hours on this huh?
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No - as you might expect, it came to me in a moment.
That's haiku!
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Looooove that last line.
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Well it's the only one that's mine!
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Cool beans
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Like it
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Aye, it'll do - considering I only wrote five seventeenths of it!
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