You words are what first captured my attention
Your way of thinking was beyond my comprehension
Your erotica poems always gave me sexual tension
These are just a few I'd like to mention
Sharing laughs, thoughts and views all night long
Writing up our own personal song
You are what helped make me strong
So, tell me, where did we go wrong
You soon became my one and only best friend
I trusted you as our souls started to blend
We confided in each other as our hearts began to mend
You always had open arms and a helping hand to extend
And finally we had our chance to really meet
As we held each other in that street
The taste of your kiss was so amazingly sweet
I finally felt as tho I was complete
One night together is all we were able to share
A love like yours I couldn't compare
Looking in your eyes I could see how much you care
Now I look for you and you're never there
Take a moment to look into my eyes
Because of your absence, my heart cries
I was always bad at the good-byes
I cant let you go and cut the ties
My best friend, if only you knew
How much I truly need you
After all we went through
You should know my love is true
Before I lay my head at night
I pray that you are safe and alright
And that the lord will bring you back to my sight
With open arms and eyes shining bright
We started our friendship with a great start
It was a masterpiece, a work of art
Please know that no matter where you are or how far apart
That you will never be far from my heart
Author notes
Yeah Lost-rose-petal
Dedicated to my best friends whom I hope I will find again, Pat G.
A contest entry
- Got any good ones ? by Anu-Nataraj.
500 points, ended February 27, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Suggestions are welcome!
Comments
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wow...that came from the heart i know...
everything is so clearly embossed in ur heart...
hoping u get him back...
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I love it!
Just like the first time you read this to me. I was in aww of your ability to complete the rhymes and tell your story from the heart. Its always hard to see a friend fade from your life and unfortunatley that happens. We all wish it didn't. Sometimes people get caught up in their own world but its those who return to you, make the effort to look you up etc. that truly care. Thats not meant to be a slam on anyone btw. Amazing poem Mindie! There is so much talent in you! Its always great to see you express it! I love you Mindie!
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romantic! Touching...good rhyming scheme, you must have invested so much time and thoughts into this.
Best of luck in finding your best friend
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your poem is good and your words tend to flow together with what you are tryimg to say. me being what I am i can somewhat feel what you are trying to say to us through your words.
Blessed be my friend -
Oh wow
I know this may sound kind of like everyone else saying I know how you feel.. But I honestly do. I started a really great friendship in July, it turned into something sexual, then we met, when he needed me to be there I was, and then all of a sudden after that, he is hardly anywhere to be found.. I fell in love with that man and now my heart aches just to hear his voice. I wait and wait for him to call and when he does I feel like one of those little puppies on the street just waiting for a crumb, once I get one I feel fed, and then it all starts over again. This poem really spoke volumes to me because this is how I feel, how I cry at night, waiting, needing to know he is alright. Great work. Good luck in the contest. Kahy -
Sweet poetress your words.. no matter how long this poem is.. is outstanding... you did amazing with getting your feelings and thoughts across.
Keep up the good work.. and never .. ever be afraid.. to write from your heart.
Riftkin
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We started our friendship with a great start
It was a masterpiece, a work of art
Please know that no matter where you are or how far apart
That you will never be far from my heart
Sad and beautiful at the same time.
thank you for sharing this piece with us all
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this is so sad to read from you. i hope that you find your friend again. i wish you the best of luck in this contest that you have entered. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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you've said it all and nothing left out for sure, except him! A great tribute to that friend you've lost......I think at one time or another we've all been there and can relate well to your written words.....................
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I love this poem Mindie. The wording is great. And you can just feel the sadness in it. Makes me think of a speacial friend I don't want to ever lose.
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in my life i have once thought the same
may be that time I've tried to write something
i cant remember my that friend's name
i don't know why i cried, was it so agonizing
i don't know what happened, but i know what you've written
not me but everybody can see and feel you've made
a very very good poem..
(first four sentences are a part of my poem)
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I was amazed. Personally, I don't think I could have done what you did with the rhyme in each line. It was wonderfully done and actually didn't feel forced. The flow changed up a few times, but the last stanza was brilliant and was by far my favorite. Your feelings are strongly written in each word and I could understand what you were going through without too much thought. Beautiful work!
> Papers
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Just reading the comments there before I posted my own and I have to say: Never feel you have to limit the amount of words you write to explain your feelings or fully express yourself, if the emotion is there, the feeling and the heart is there, then people will be drawn in and read it, regardless of the length. If not, then they are likely just souless wretches and unfortunately yes, there are plenty of them on this site.
However, I can say that the heart and feeling are strong in this piece and it does draw you in, even more so as it is quite difficult to write such strong feeling and emotion in rhyme without loosing something along the way and this piece in no way suffers from this, as the wording is so tight and works very well.
Very sad, painful and relatable as similar things happen to so many of us, that we draw an even stronger emotional link to the poem because of that.
Good write.
(Sorry for the long comment lol)
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Bravo!!!!!
Exceptional timing, beautiful and yet so real I could feel the sadness and almost hear the words spoken like a prayer to the best friend out there.
Well Done! It looked long to start - but held my interest all the way through each stanza. Thank you for posting it for us to share.
Best regards,
cheryl
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Your comment was great! Im always afraid to write long poems for the fear of people not being interested enough to read them. You totally lifted that weight off my shoulders for this poem! Thanks Cheryl!
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Your Very Welcome
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Wow thanks!
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Sincerely this is Great!
You should enter it into a contest - it is Gold for sure!
At least if I were judging.
All the Best,
Cheryl
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I absoutely loved it
Great job pen on poet Ari
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How beautifully sad! I hope that you are able to find this person again. It seems like he means a lot to you. Losing a best friend is quite devastating. Good luck to you and I wish you well dear!
Jeremy0826
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