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Jack

I Just saw my buddy named Jack 
He was having a migraine attack.
His wife said, "You're a pain.
All you do is complain.”
When I left he was helping her pack.

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  • Vera Rich gold member
    April 14

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    Thank you for entering the "Health Care poems" competition. But - sorry - the rules stated quite clearly:

    Poems submitted should be "publication-ready". "Work in progresss" is NOT appropriate for this competition. Hence any entries that request advice for further revision will be disqalified.

    Remember - the whole purpose of this competition was to elicit poems suitable for use in a forthcoming live poetry presentation and publication in an associated chapbook.


    • GotLilt
      April 14
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      I Didn't realize one little thing left unchecked would be such a problem. Sorry I blew it.


  • Lanasaur
    February 9
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    lol

    this is funny good limerick thanks for entering


  • myrataal silver member
    February 9

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    Your wry sense of humor ...

    truly made this limerick a giggle to read. Often it is the last straw that breaks the camel's back, not so?

    Love
    Myra