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The inching up

reaching

 

you born to cower born to down with

eyes and mind set to lowly sediment

kicked from foot by they who

but you not never always

shrinking from lowering sky

 

you dimly outlined against the gloomlight

with the dawnbird on your brow

guiding the dew to the crowding grass

the mass crush upon you who solitary

stand the stochaic moment shrugging

 

you crack in the dawn you

capillary breather of daystuff

begin not to always giveitup

and send your shadow feeling out

for knowledge of receding night

 

you what you are now essence

coming up to meet the day's crown

and is it fate or main determination

in the upward climbing hallelujah flinging

all the ever to ethereal heaven

 

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  • samantha17
    April 7
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    thats amazing

  • wow. i love the picture, and i love your poem even more. it has this refreshing vibe to it. i love the intense imagery and how real it felt. keep penning


  • raw love
    February 18
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    mmm I liked this. Nice cadence in your words. nice nice.


  • poetryality silver member
    February 8

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    Midway this poetic journey my mind began to sing;

    "I think that I shall never see
    A poem as lovely as a tree..."


    Never in my wildest imagination would I have suspected to witness a descriptive work such as this that denotes the "essence" of the mastodon you've enlisted on this page. Superb!


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee

    • Thank you so much, Renee! XD I'm glad to hear that the poem managed to do for you what seeing the tree did for me.

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