Haven't much,
Yet I have plenty to share.
Bound to these walls,
Without a thing at which
To stare.
If for you, I could give
The moon, I would take
The stars from their blanket,
And sail them your way.
My world would exist
As a memory no more.
Though a never ending tale
Of beauty, not torn.
Scattered by remains
Of this unknown existence.
Be mine, and this is yours
Forever to keep.
Of all I can provide,
There is no gold
Nor mansions
But more a beautiful field
For a garden,
And a maiden.
If you would accept,
This fragile gift
My song, to your heart
Your love, to my lips.
You can tell the world
You can tell the world
You can tell everybody
That I, too
Admitted
Your's are the sweetest eyes,
I've ever seen.
Author notes
Kinda threw my own spin on it..
hope you enjoy
A contest entry
- ...And You Can Tell Everybody... by Desire.
1221 points, ended February 12, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thank you very much.. I'm glad my poem made you see such beautiful pictures in your head :] I reallly enjoyed writing this and I LOVEEE the song it's based off of. It was a very fun contest and I'm really glad you liked my poem. -
Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Your world into mine
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times~ I am Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest You took the prompt and ran with it~ Bravo!!
When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~ I have to say- when I read Your words~
for some reason I kept seeing a basket of fruit- as if an offering to whomever would accept- quite different- almost like a little red riding hood image- young child- holding basket but it holds fruit- yet the symbolism is of blessings- to deliver - if that makes sense I kept feeling like a Sound of Music type of feeling- going on the hill and spinning around- just elated to be alive though the reality sends shivers down spine because there is nothing to eat- clothes tattered and torn also feet hurt from long walk~ but a light shines from above onto child as if to guide-
~ Love the direction You took this prompt
Hopefully my words make some sense
Powerful verse and message You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled-
If for you, I could give
The moon, I would take
The stars from their blanket,
And sail them your way..
Emotional Voice spoken~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit
also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
with much love and light~ Desire~*~
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hmm
thankies.
and you know what? I think you're right.
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awe =] your poem was adorable, I enjoyed reading it. poems like this aren't really my forte, so i enjoy reading things i'm not used to writing myself.
uhhh...the only thing i would change is removing the comma after line four, it doesn't sound right to me if the pause is added in there.
keep up the great work!
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