I remembered what you said,
The feelings the same.
You couldn't get used to this feeling,
Inside.
Said it brought bad images,
And forced you to hide.
So many months spent waiting;
For that love to find its path,
And float my way.
Then I put the clues together,
Did the math.
Soon had to say
You could have
Knocked me out
With a feather
Thrown me down
Like a dagger
Cracked me open
Like a seam.
Instead you left me,
Lonely and sad
Heartbroken and mad.
Because you refused
T
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e
A
F
e
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l
i
n
g
Deep inside of you,
F
O
R
M
E
So time had come, your turn was done
And now it was revenge.
A knife in my heart,
And one in your head.
A smack to the face,
And bullet to make your skin shred.
Loneliness was over,
For now you up and left
The time arrived for me to lie
And say, to me, you never meant a thing
Now I killed you,
Can't you see?
It's only now,
You can feel me.
As I stab your heart as you did mine
And leave the blood,
And the body
Behind.
Author notes
Rahahaa funny.
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this was amazing i loved your emotion...sorry its taking so long to judge i have to go threw and read each persons poem...i'm going to announce the winner after i finish reading all of the poems....i loved your vocabulary...and i felt every word:] and good luck..ps i loved the way your poem was formatted
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party
party party join us join us
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lol thank you all
and no its not real
just what would be real had my emotions gotten the best of me.
lol
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Excellent
Hmm...rather strange. Glad it's only a contest entry. Although venting one's feelings through writing a poem might be theraputic. Very well written. -
I agree with Kiddy on the cascading words, nice effect. Offered a feeling of hopeless falling. Ironically titled happy ending
, I hope it's not a personal story haha. But it's nicely written. The last four lines work the best out of the whole piece. They provide a perfect rhythm and cadence to the reader, very effective. Good luck in your contest,
Alicia -
Worth featuring... very dramatic and I loved the story in it... falling of words, letter by letter, in the middle, works out well... I could understand you falling emotions very well there....
thanks for sharing..keep writing...
Love and regards
Kiddy
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